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Reviews for The Line Begins to Blur

By : VirusVescichetta
  • From Lyu on April 07, 2013
    I like this story.

    I'll expecting next chapter!
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  • From ANON - andy on March 12, 2013
    I love the story. I've been checking in every week hoping for a new chapter. Im kinda hoping to read more about Kai's sister though, anyway keep writing:)
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  • From XIII13 on March 09, 2013
    I've been lurking on here for months reading every chapter to the story, and I finally made an account to review this story specifically. I really respect that the story isn't just pure sex all the time (not that there's anything wrong with that) and that Kai's adventures are actually entertaining. I have to say that I love the dynamic between Kai and Lydia, it makes it worth reading in between the sex scenes. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Causticsoda on January 31, 2013
    You, sir, are a cruel man. Been waiting chapters for those two to get down and dirty. That end part was getting super hot too. Otherwise, a particularly good chapter. I really admire how much content you squeeze into each chapter. They always feel substantial and worth the wait. My one criticism would be that I didn't really notice when Kai lost one of his swords. So when I finally got to a paragraph later on that referenced he only had one, I was a little confused and had to backtrack to find that it was mentioned in one sentence, just felt a bit glossed over. Nothing major, just broke the flow a little bit. I feel it should be a little more explicit when the main character's equipment/status undergoes a significant change. That was my only gripe though. Lydia talking dirty was as amazing as I thought it would be, hope to see a little more of that in the next chapter. Nothing over the top, just a curse here and there adds a lot to the scene. Keep up the great work!
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  • From ANON - kyle on September 23, 2012
    great work i love it poor kai swords are not cheap
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  • From ANON - black wind2254 on September 16, 2012
    Great story, I love Kai and his sense of humor. Midway through reading I had an idea to maybe incorporate my Skyrim guy, if you are interested or just want a run-down on my Skyrim dude, shoot me an email. My email is masonhart@satx.rr.com
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  • From ANON - Malchior on August 30, 2012
    More than just 10 people read this, I assure you. I know of 10 friends that have all read this story, and myself makes 11. Plus you have some 14,000 hits, so I imagine it's a lot more than just us. I like the idea of skipping training unless you can come up with something unique to do. I don't imagine there being much combat or sex scenes during Greybeard training. Plus the Greybeard part of the game always felt like a drag to me. One of those 'here's a bunch of info and some new abilities' section that is apart of nearly every game.

    I know you mentioned you wouldn't be progressing on the Kailev/Lydia front, but I think that's a shame; you've got a lot of chemistry building up between them. Though I think it would be difficult to pull it off. I just don't picture Lydia putting up with Kailev sleeping around with lots of women, and it would probably be difficult for him to hide if they travel together all the time. Although, based off the characterizations of the Skyrim women so far, maybe they're a lot more open to 'companionship' than one would think. Perhaps it's even seen as practical for traveling companions to satisfy each others urges when necessary.

    Either way, I like this story (not just as a smut story either). I find Kailev hilarious and I love the camaraderie between Lydia Kailev. The combats are pretty good too, and I can easily picture them happening in my mind as well.
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  • From ANON - Cipher on August 04, 2012
    it seems with each released chapter the story simply gets better and better the flirting between lydia and kai is humorous as well as captivating i look forward to seeing what happens between the two, in regards to the dragonborn training that should be added if you want to add it people will read it all the same it could be a good idea to write that chapter if you need time to plan what kai is gonna do after his training, would certianly like to see what he does in riften haha

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  • From ANON - Marcus13 on July 15, 2012
    Training with the Graybeards has some potential, certainly. But it depends on what you want to write really. Are you interested in writing that sequence, or would you enjoy referencing it and instead getting to the next adventure you have planned for Kai? I'm for whatever, honestly. Though a Graybeards scene would probably require a lot of tweaking to keep things interesting, this is after all one of the scenes that most players are very familiar with and have played through many times. If that player intended to do the main quest at least.

    Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - John Madden on July 06, 2012
    Best Skyrim story I've read so far. Keep up the excellent work.
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  • From ANON - Ian on July 06, 2012
    I just wanted to put in my two cents and say I hope you know there's more than ten people reading. I check back every couple days for an update and I'm a fan of the quality writing fused together with combat and extremely well...sexy...sex scenes. I hope you keep it up man!
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  • From ANON - Marcus13 on June 05, 2012
    Great job, keep it up please!
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  • From ANON - Cipher on May 07, 2012
    just though you should know they're are more then five people readily checking this, i do enjoy your writing style, kai is an character that makes this more than your run of the mill fic and hope you go far with the story would be interesting to read
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  • From ANON - Fenrir on April 18, 2012
    OK, not gonna lie, I fucking love Kai's sense of humor in the story, at first I kinda "dafucked" at an argonian fanfic but You paint a nice picture with this, I hope to see more chapters soon
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  • From xjoedirtx on April 14, 2012
    So I've been reading ever since the first chapter, and I have to say I'm very impressed with your skill as a writer. Not just with dialogue, but in grasping the personalities of each character. The sex scenes are very well detailed, and Kai seems to be shaping up to be quite the player in Skyrim. It gets me wondering as to what would happen should his sexual exploits with human women get out to the public. How would they react towards him, since he's an Argonian sleeping with humans? Two women in Whiterun who everybody in town knows in just a few days, and two women who work in the same area of town, no less. Will anybody ever find out that Kai's been cutting a swath through the women(and undergarments) of Skyrim, and if so, would there be a possible storyline out of that in the future?
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