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Reviews for The Line Begins to Blur

By : VirusVescichetta
  • From ANON - Jeff on April 13, 2012
    I love this story, and finally someone wrote something with Ysolda in it.
    I would like to see a scene with Lydia as just a after battle high on adrenaline type of thing, there are not enough of Lydia with a nonhumans in my opinion.
    can't wait for the next chapter

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  • From ANON - Marcus13 on March 16, 2012
    Really liking this story so far, just wanted to say that. Probably some of the best written stuff I've seen on here.

    As for suggestions? Well I'm positive I've already said Ysolda, but for stuff I've NEVER seen... I don't think I've ever seen anyone do an elf girl of any kind. There's two I can think who have possibilities. First there's that Altmer Thieves Guild fence in Windhelm, Nirayne. Even if your character doesn't join the guild, he could probably need something from her.

    Also there is a Bosmer in Riften called Nivenor, she's sort of rich and sort of spoiled, but she's also being cheated on by her husband Bolli, perhaps she'd want some revenge sex is all I'm saying. XD

    Keep up the good job!
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  • From ANON - igore on February 23, 2012
    Really like this story, mainly because it's plot with a bit of porn, and the main character is really fun. Also all the characters are really well rounded personality wise. Great job and hope to see more.
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  • From ANON - A Concerned Citizen on February 23, 2012
    Re: Lydia

    I feel it would be improper to exclude her because you don't want to do 'just another lydia scene' when the market is saturated. While Lydia could suffice in the role of foil, I think it should be because you think it benefits the story more.

    It's might be worth considering how Lydia could develop over time as a romantic interest, or keep her in the 'bro' demographic.
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  • From FoggyAlex17 on February 10, 2012
    Chapters like this aren't pointless so don't be so hard on yourself. Its the little chapters like this that build the story's plot and help us learn about the character's... well, character, it builds thier personality and that of Kai's companions.

    Glad you liked my idea and I can't wait to see what you come up with.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 09, 2012
    You are being to hard on yourself. There's nothing wrong with Ch7. Sometimes it's good to slow down a story. The chapter gives some more insight into the characters and it helps establish Tel as thane. So really you shouldn't be upset with it. Now with that said I would like to request that we get to see a darker side to tel and for him to join the Family. I don't think it fits him right now but maybe something could send him down a darker path. that made be your intent already judging by the the Title of the Story. keep up the good work.
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  • From RogueHippie on February 09, 2012
    Personally, even though I'm here for smut, I enjoy chapters like chapter 7. It helps add character to the story and makes Kai & Co. appear more realistic. So even though you may dislike that part, it should stick around as a little break in the action.

    That's my belief, anyhow, so take it for what it is.
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  • From FoggyAlex17 on February 03, 2012
    Liking how you follow the Dragonborn plotline. Fingers crossed for a Khajit or Argonian pairing. Maybe a rough course with a Dark Brotherhood assassin?
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  • From kallison on January 28, 2012
    I'm absolutely enjoying this! Doing a fantastic job!

    Major kudos!
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  • From ANON - Tyrmer on January 07, 2012
    Loving it so far, nice to find an ongoing Elder Scrolls story with a nice balance of smut and plot. Will definitely keep reading.
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  • From ANON - madbob on January 07, 2012
    this is funny the protaganist is not a pussy and sooner or later he'l be getting some pussy so i cant wait to see what comes next.

    also deffinetly do kahjits cause there awesome
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 31, 2011
    I must encourage you, as Aela is one of my favorite people in Skyrim, and its always fun to see other people's interpretations of of the world at large. To see your decisions and their justifications is great along with the interactions with characters.
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  • From ANON - The 'Hardened'Avenger on December 31, 2011
    I was under the impression you would make like every other writer and simply make your character the most skilled and experienced 'lover' from the start.

    Nice to see some realism in this baby.

    Much obliged for your continued work. Not many like it and each chapter is a refreshing read. I've no more suggestions concerning the game for the moment, so i'll remain observant and review until a thought comes to mind.

    *Tips hat*
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  • From ANON - XIII on December 14, 2011
    I really liked the fact that you take the time to build up the story, give the character some added depth and your humor (speaking of course about the sarcasm), instead of just starting the story with a debaucherous spree of sex (of course... This would be the site to find that). I really enjoy reading this and look forward to updates!
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  • From xjoedirtx on December 12, 2011
    Wow. After reading this, I feel like my fic is crap. The dialogue is way better, and your character is really well developed, even though its only 3 chapters in. I love it!! But now I hate mine, so its sort of bittersweet lol.
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