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Reviews for The Bergman Affair

By : HunterOpera

From salarta on January 13, 2013
I haven't posted before, but I've been silently enjoying the fic and I'm glad to see a new chapter. While there's a lot of good stuff here, my favorite part was making the slimes into Samus' predators and expounding the point that she's been reduced so low that she's the prey of absolutely everything no matter how slow or weak it is. Brannigan screwing with her, picking her up and dropping her back off at the beginning again was enjoyable, but I kind of wish it involved more of Samus trying to deal with being surrounded by nothing but predators and always at risk of a slime catching up to her and taking its fill of her. Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.
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From DrkVrtx on November 25, 2012
I think we're getting back into Cave arc territory, in that I'm betting the scenes you plan on writing soon are going to have me depressed and aroused at the same time. This chapter made me real feel for our poor bounty hunter, and I think this line ' Through all the spunk it was impossible to tell if she was crying, but Brannigan liked to think that she was' was the real kicker. Also, I'd assumed that the all the options you'd have Brannigan/Melissa limit for Samus would be based around her ability to move/fight back; I definitely didn't see them forcing this particular choice on her.

Having to choose where she gets her pleasure...damn, you're cruel. And creative. I can already see some interesting possibilities for this particular brand of torture. I wonder how Samus will perceive the choices she makes, how she will view herself in the light of essentially bringing herself to a tailored orgasm time and again. And the Zoomers man...they're really getting their payback for all those times Samus casually blasted them out of her way, huh. Oh, have the mighty have fallen - at least for now. It remains to be seen how Samus is going to find a way out of this one, heck even if she does, will she still retain her mind? It seems she already beginning to question her ability to fight Melissa's nefarious tactics...
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From MorbidFantasy on November 23, 2012
I absolutely loved the imprisonment arc. Loved the way Samus is subdued through shear numbers of psychic and physical restraints. I read all the chapters in one go and was sorely disappointed when I reached the end.

The fact that Samus's views on sex is unconventionally liberal and is immune to the psychological trauma of rape is a big hook for me. I especially like how you described her as for the most part being open to the pleasure even though her logical mind is telling her that it was being used to condition and own her.

Taking away her jumping abilities leads me to believe that you eventually want the only position for Samus to be in that isn't punishable to be for her to be on all fours. The gradual limitation of her movement without actual restraints is a fantastic idea, and I look forward to seeing what you have next for her.

I must admit that in my haste to continue the sex scenes, I skimmed over the overarching plot line in the rest of the galaxy, and had to backtrack after hitting the end to pick up the missing pieces, but that was of my own volition and not that your writing's fault.
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From DrkVrtx on November 22, 2012
Ah, so Samus finally gets away from the Zebesians and co. - and ensures no one lives on to tell the tale. Good to have you back, Samus...ah, but wait, what is this? Captured by Spore Spawn?! Oh well, at least she got one peaceable chapter to herself. I wonder if Melissa plans on bringing Samus directly to her soon; it seems like she is bringing all the pieces of her vast puzzle together, so perhaps we'll be seeing a confrontation between them shortly? Either way, I am as interested as ever to see what you have in store for our favourite bounty hunter.
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From JViper on November 04, 2012
Nice to see this was not dropped. Even better that we're past the gauntlet of the last few chapters, they were good but they were starting to become a little difficult to read through. Too much action and despair makes it difficult for me to pay attention. Glad we've moved on. I do get an ominous feeling from the end though and although not versed in the lore of metroid that much, I'm very much excited to see where this is going. Keep up.
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From DrkVrtx on October 03, 2012
Ah, so retribution is at hand - quite literally, in fact. Samus discovering the knife and finally getting her hands on it brought a smile to my face too, though I have to wonder just how Samus can overcome the Zebesians in her present state. She's clearly exhausted and worn out, physically and mentally, but despite the supposed hopelessness of her situation, she doesn't forget who or what she is.

She's been trapped in this particular circumstance for what, about 5 or 6 chapters now? I don't think that the story has stagnated at any point during that, in fact I think it's really come into its own. The things Samus has gone through in there have blurred the line between disturbing and arousing, and sometimes I think I'm enjoying it a little too much lol. The scene with the Zebesians before Samus discovers the knife, for instance, is just...hot, and I'm wondering to myself why I'm not hating them with passion for what they're doing. Well, I'm sure they'll be getting their comeuppance soon enough ^^

Speaking of that, after this, again I have to wonder what's next for Samus. Kraid? Ridley? Metroids? Shriekbats??? And of course, Meliisa seems to be piecing together her plan and progressing at a frightening pace; I doubt she brokered peace between the Kriken/Federation for honest, reputable reasons. I'm interested to see what she ultimately has in store for Madeline, too.
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From DrkVrtx on August 18, 2012
Hmm, I left after reading Ch11 slightly depressed haha. I guess the fact that intelligent, sentient life forms have been introduced into the mix makes Samus' circumstances really hit home. In all the previous encounters, I'm able to somewhat wall off the fact that Samus is being abused and taken against her will due to the perpetrators being far far from human. The Zoomer/Kago/Kaayes encounter became increasingly disturbing as it continued, however. IIRC, the encounters up to that point have lasted a chapter, with Samus rising up to cut down whichever creature bothered her at that particular time, but now we see her seemingly well and truly stuck.

"Samus Aran screamed, pulling on her bonds, shaking as she tried desperately to free herself."

This line bothered me in particular, it's certainly not what I expected Samus to do, even in her predicament. I don't know...it gives me echoes of Other M's Ridley scene. Perhaps that was your intention. Though I suppose in this case, her reaction is more justifiable, as she's literally stripped down, weakened and defenceless.

Well, now that Samus has encountered the Zebesians - who actually look like they know what they are doing and why as well as how to truly humiliate the esteemed Hunter...I suppose I should get used to this depressed feeling in preparation for future chapters. It's well written, and I do and don't like it, if that makes sense : )
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From EvilCareBear on August 08, 2012
I'll admit, your story is the reason I chose Melissa to be the first villain in my story. I initially planned something else, but I liked the idea. That said, I enjoy your characterization more than mine. I've always been fascinated by characters who believe themselves to be in the right and want to 'convert' the hero to their way of thinking and I think you pulled that off really well. As for the sexy parts, I think you do a great job as well, they are always really hot. Overall, great job and I look forward to future updates.
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From JViper on August 07, 2012
Somehow I managed to miss these last updates. Anyway good work in advancing the plot. And poor Samus can't even catch a break, It's one situation after another, not that I'm complaining. I'm genuinely curious as to how she's going to escape this and how Anthony's part develop. I've been loving the journey, so keep it up good sir.
Also, saw that you responded to me in the thread, thank you. Sometimes just like the author the reviewer miss the attention.
Nah, just kidding.
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From DrkVrtx on August 06, 2012
Oh, the humiliation. Our brave bounty hunter conquered by the lowly Zoomer. The only way this could be worse is if it had been a Geemer.

The Kago/Kaayes 'torture' is cruel but in a completely different fashion to, say, the Draygon encounter. Being brought just to the point of release continually over the duration of several days seems to be quite the maddening experience of pleasure and pain. However, seeing as Melissa is intending to 'punish' her (what on earth does she consider her previous machinations to be? lol), I have to wonder what she has in store to provide Samus further discomfort. Also, it seems the influence of the Kaayes has infiltrated certain political circles? Hmm, you certainly aren't finished with them yet, have you? : p
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From DrkVrtx on June 24, 2012
How this is without more reviews baffles me. This is a very intriguing fic, and there are times when I'm not sure whether to be sickened or aroused. Each chapter just ramps it up, so to speak. The little digs at Other M and Sakamoto most certainly drew smiles from me, but I have to say that without a doubt, my favourite moment(s) so far involve the Kaayes. I like the fact that they still had a residual effect on Samus even after she had dealt with them. After Draygon though...well I have no idea what you have planned on top of that, short of literally ripping Samus apart >_
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From JViper on March 25, 2012
It would be a shame if one of the best Metroid fics to stay without any review. Especially since you're improving chapter by chapter.
The story is a little disjointed as it has been repeating the same pattern of a little plot before and after the scene itself which is the longer part. So it can get a bit tedious due to the structure you choose since the scenes are so much better.
I think you found a nice voice for Samus and seeing her dish out the pain after the deed has been incredibly satisfying, especially because said deed has been really hot most of the times.
Looking forward to how this develops.
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