It's been years since I last looked at this, so I couldn't remember where I'd left it exactly. What the hell then, let's just read it from the beginning.

First surprise when glancing through the Chapter List: you've actually finished it. Congrats, sincerely. I'm familiar with the long, seemingly unending grind that's writing a fully fleshed out story like this. Life and writer's block get in the way, sometimes you just really can't be arsed to put pen to paper - so to speak; at some point you may even think 'fuck this, why am I bothering' when motivation hits the floor. But in the end, you finally put a dot to that last sentence and it's all over. It's certainly a journey.

Reading this through from start to finish several years on was an interesting experience. Previously, I can admit that I was hung up with a case of hero-worship. Samus is/will likely always be my favourite character of fiction and part of me just couldn't settle with the fact that she was losing over and over again, which then made the situations she was ending up in difficult to swallow. Now, I'm a much more open-minded reader in general and while I've certainly lost no respect for Samus I was better able to appreciate all the salacious, degrading corners you wrote her into. And oh fucking boy, some of those scenes.

The Zebesians, Brannigan and Sakomoto's encounters with Samus were the highlights for me, and they worked so well thanks to all the context that is built up prior. Which isn't to say that I didn't enjoy others; I did, but those really hit the spot, coming to life in my mind's eye and the painted visual was so, so intense. 

There are some weak points (IMO of course) that I noted while reading. First, the ending - more specifically, how Samus beats Melissa/Damara. It was too abrupt, I feel. There is a trend throughout the story in which Samus is described as being thoroughly ground down/exhausted, yet when fighting her way out of these circumstances does so with seemingly boundless energy. You can excuse it up to a certain point, but the way this occurs between her and Melissa didn't work for me, unfortunately. Feels like a blink and you'll miss it moment, too sudden to leave the impact it should, particularly after what Damara has put her through.

Secondly, the Ridley arc. You can tell how much love and work was put into crafting, characterising and depicting everyone's favourite space dragon, the trouble is it comes at the cost of Samus becoming a side character in what is meant to be her story. It was an arc that pushed Ridley a bit too far onto centre stage, I feel, and while it was a very fascinating read he overshadows Samus to the point where I felt I was supposed to be reading a story focused on him instead.

Mia Xen: comes and goes almost without a trace. She ultimately feels like a cameo when it seemed earlier on in the story that she is being setup for something more substantial. The Federation/political element of the plot falls a bit flat towards the end too. It kept my interest because I'm always for expanding the Metroid lore and exploring those parts the games never touch on in proper detail, but I think it turns out to be something that - while giving the reader respite from Samus' sexual misfortunes - didn't necessarily prove integral to the whole experience. Wouldn't say that it could just be cut entirely, because it does give some things more context, but it isn't what really weaves the story together.

Enough criticism though, I'm not looking to rain on your parade months late to the party. Again, congrats on finishing this and producing an engaging, well written story. Metroid can't boast to having many of those, particularly when it comes to smut. I'd say that you did Samus good and proper. Really good and proper. Happy that I've got something to come back to in a few years and get hot and bothered about all over again.

Kudos.
 

Good work and thanks for the shout-out! It ended nicer than I normally go for, and I'd hoped to see more of Samus made into "lowest in the food chain" but I enjoyed what was there.

God damn you, actually managing to finish your story. Mentioning me in the acknowledgments. I'd look like an ass if I didn't write a review now. You have any idea how old the password is for this account? Took me literally several minutes to figure it out. Thank god this site doesn't have a lock out after a certain number of attempts, that would have fucked me. And now it has the nerve to recaptcha me, even after I logged in. Point is I've sacrificed a lot for you, so this comment better be put up on your fridge.

Now for the actual post-mortem itself, since you have now finished this beast (fuccckkkkkkkkk youuuuuu). Imma be straight up honest with ya for this, because I hate empty platitudes.

"Great work, keep it up!" Go fuck yourself. Anyway.

I'll start off with the good, I'm not sure I believe all your talk about this being your first plunge into writing porn. You tricked the filthy masses, but you ain't pulling the wool over my eyes son. Nah, this isn't no novice work. Actually, it has been awhile since I read the beginning. I'm sure these rose-tented glasses are reliable.

Probably my favorite part is your general expansions on Metroid lore, nothing stuck out to me as silly and I thought all the additions were good ones. Even if unnecessary (l'll get to that later). Ridley speech patterns sticks out to me as particuarly nice, has a very odd cadence to it, forces you read his lines differently in your head.

In my opinion the story peaked with the zebesians, brannigan (btw holy shit what a minor character to bring out, he's in some cheesy comics as a Samus fanboy if I remember right) and right after Ridley. They all had Samus acting like Samus, actively looking for ways to turns the tables and escape. That's what I'm wanting out of a Metroid story and you delivered there really well. Honestly I think the story would have been strongest if Samus had successfully escaped after Ridley was dealt with, it was at that point I was on board and rooting for Samus to win.

Now I gotta rag on your ending a bit. I think I understand what you were going for, Samus being so overpowering it wasn't even really a fight, but that was over way too fast. Had no real gradification to it, was just over. It'd be like you finally got with the girl of your dreams after months of buildup and you jizz in your pants while she's taking off her shirt. I think you should have let the physic fight with Melissa be more in depth (maybe Melissa allows Samus into her mind in an attempt to fuck with her in a maze-like setting and what Samus needed was to get past that initial barrier) but mainly it needed a reason why this situation was unique that Samus could overpower Melissa. Because at the end my main question was mostly just why Samus didn't do this earlier. Seems it would have saved her a lot of trouble. Oh yeah, and then the physical fight with Damara could and should have been more drawn out. It shouldn't have been a struggle for Samus, she still should dominate the fight, but even the most kind hearted person would indulge in a little "No, actually I'm much better than you and I'm going to show you we're not even in the same league" after what she went through.

The galactic politics was the weakest point of the story by far, and not because it didn't have sexy times. It just didn't tie in with the main arc of the story at all and felt sort of like I was reading a completly different story, just sort of tacked on. I'm pretty sure you could cut out all of it and the main story would still make sense. Not to say it was bad or not enjoyable, you had some really cool ideas in there and the writing was strong, but it just felt completly unnecessary. I think it would have been better as it's own side story. Actually I had a similar idea for my story, my plan was for Samus to sort of worry about the general state of the galaxy throughout the story while she was out of commission, but never get any news about it. Then at the end she finds out that everything's basically the same, maybe some new taxes to cover the expansion of the galactic navy to better combat the pirates. Just as sort of a "the galaxy is bigger than the adventures of Samus Aran".

Oh yeah final note, Mia Xen. Come on now. What's the old saying? Just you can do something doesn't mean you should. We all know how that worked out in the famous documentary Jurassic Park.

I'm hoping somewhere in this rambling, incoherent mess I made a point. So in summary: Great work, keep it up!

Ha, you actually ended it, mad man! What can I say? It was long but plesant ride, it's a great story non the less.

I can't believe we're finally reaching the end, especially after that enormous hiatus of yours. I was pretty sure this story was dead and would remain a sort-of-bad-end and then I decide to read it again today outy of nostalgia only to discover that there's been multiple updates.

And what an update it was, with Samus FINALLY, after FAR too many dragged out chapters turned the tabble on her captors without having to resort to a Deus Ex Machina like back with the whole "Ridley Out Of Nowhere!" thing.

Ultimately, looking back on the entire fic, my favorite part kinkwise still remain the Bestiality. Probably because they're the only part that are 100% uniquely Metroid. And by that I mean that while bondage, brainwashing and petplay can be found in many media outside of Metroid, where else are you going to get these peculiar beasties ? Only in Metroid, that's where.

Also, the whole politic plotline thing just kind of made my eyes slid right over it every time it showed up. =P

All in all, this was a pretty good ride. Kind of dragged its feet in the middle but the start was really awesome and got me hooked and the last arc was nice enough with an absolutely satisfying ending.

Great job there.

PS : UPDATE THE GODDAMNED HENTAI FOUNDRY VERSION ALREADY!

Ha, I like your bad-ass Samus in 43 chapter. No bullshitting, strait to business. Also nice idea about backup, make a lot of sense for psychics to do things like that.

The constant up and down of almost escaping only to be torn down again and again is getting old. The fic feels like it's just being dragged out for the sole purpose of torturing Samus at this point. I'm not even sure what your end game is, is it that Samus escapes? Or is it just Samus ending as a mind broken slave? There barely seems to be anything left of her at this point so I'm not seeing any outcome beyond that. Disappointing given that I tend to favor turnabout with this kind of thing regardless of who's on which end. Still I'll keep watching even if it's just for closure at this point. 

Very well written in terms of getting people hooked though.

Mostly liking it, though I wish the sex scenes were longer.  I just hope Samus does not escape in the end.

Yeah, because I just LOVE it when bad guys succeed.

NOT! 

Chap.40.  Good chapter, would appreciate some more normal rape but still sexy.  Some metroid sex and impregnation would be good.  Hopefully Samus will not escape at the end.

Hey that last chapter (40) was good!

I like this story, this kind of bondage is my thing, but story wise I think it's waaay too long. They tried to broke her 3 times in one story and most chapters just showing her completley passive in slightly different surroundings.So great story kink wise, but I think 40+ chapters with the same theme a little bit too much.

This is such bullshit, what's happened to Samus. Plain and simple. It's not hot, it's cruel. Depressing. UGLY. 

I love it, Cant wait for more chapters where Samus get abused even more. Keep it up.