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From ANON - Guy on July 08, 2014
I was hoping this story wouldn't die, but it seems it has
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From ANON - Akuma-Heika on July 03, 2014
ch5
You forgot to mention Alice's skirt she wears even in monster form.

Oh yeah, while it looks like you are going in this direction anyway it will still make the request: PLEASE MAKE IT A LUKAHAREM! FTW!

How would Wriph know how her sister�s pussy feels on a penis?

I thought you said the Twins saw no reason to break men: if that is the case then why does Milia like doing so? If they are brought to the edge of insanity that would usually mean they are left broken instead.

I was expecting Luka to take charge so to speak but I was expecting him to come to that conclusion himself when I started reading the lemon considering Luka claimed to be going along with his primal instincts but only a little ways down he goes back to being submissive...I also find it strange that he never played with either twin's breasts considering his fascination of them throughout your fic. For a boob�s man the fact he didn't pay attention to them is strange...

The gerbil comparison was funny

...surprising considering their father would have been "human" and thus an Illias follower...always possible such men could be raped but the odds of the combination...then again fanon.

ch6
TFF? What does that refer to?

How does she have no choice when she can remove it?

If memory serves Demon Decapitation was an abbreviated name for it. I remember a few of them had relatively long names. It was humorous for some of them. Cannot remember them but now I am curious. I have part 1 and 2 on my port hard drive while I have a fusion download of 1 and 2 on my new PC and part 3 which I just downloaded...haven't played it yet and I will have to fuse them all together and start from scratch...eventually. I want to win part 3 first.

Might I suggest Luka saying "So I'm (or "I am") doing it, IN HER STEAD."? (Not sure if the comma is needed or not. it feels like it would be but that also looks like a prepositional phrase, I believe that is what they are called, and they do not have commas.)

I would not describe her skin tone as pink...I believe it was pretty pale.

What object did Granberia pick up?

ch7
DMC4 Gilgamesh? Gabriel? I am curious on the origins of those two comments.

Po? Name origin or was it one you came up with?

If it was her right hand than she should hold it to the left so she could pull the hammer with her right arm. From the right side it�s her left arm that is doing the most work.

Was the Goblin Girl named in canon?

Does vampire training mean sex or blood drinking? lol

ch8
Just don't MAKE money off them

It�s funny how much faster she got at hypnosis in game when it came to conning people lol. I thought it was humorous in canon as well.

Producing herself in a big smile...I am positive that needs to be rewritten but I am unsure how to go about it.

but back HERE it was

Considering they are monsters they would make an effective weapon

Wouldn�t the Harpies have some male human children with Harpy blood on occasion? the fact that the Elf Twins in your fic have succubus blood and the Sabasa King in canon is of monster blood means they can have male children...they just end up being human with their monster blood lying dormant unless/until certain conditions are met.

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From ANON - Akuma-Heika on July 03, 2014
Surprised liese died in this since you gave her monster heritage and made her extremely sexually frustrated. Her monster blood would allow her to heal somewhat from semen and Luka is an incredibly large and virile source of it. She also displayed attraction to his body his first time and in your fic they share no blood relation. She excused his experiences with Ther who, for all intents and purposes, is his stepsister, so why would she have issue with Luka sleeping with her, his stepmother? Especially ince she knows what her death would do to him, considering she called Ther out on it.
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From ANON - Kiritsugu on March 11, 2014
Awesome! I finished Monmusu Quest 3 a few days ago and was starving for some good fanfiction for it. I love what you've done to change the story so far and I'm sure I'll love what you do in the future.
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From ANON - Paul Perkins on January 28, 2014
I am glad to see the story has picked back up! It is a really good one, with it staying so close to the game but being so much better. I was always kinda pissed that Luka was such a pussy in the game.
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From ANON - thaonlyone on January 25, 2014
Amazing story. The highest praise i can give: 1. I actually like this story more than the source material. 2. If this was a physical book I would pay money for it.
Couple of requests, there better be hot marathon Farewell sex with Luka and Thermidor before she goes solo. Also, don't know if you have an idea on the ending, but I think Luka, being all OP at the end, should have short little epilogue chapters with all his partners one on one where he just lays them down and goes all Alpha on them, making them go sensory overload instead. would be an interesting dynamic switch and also a way to show his long development of his skills and power. Just a thought, I eagerly await more!
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From ANON - The Truth on January 25, 2014
a seemingly great take on the MGQ story, ruined with tons of shitty OCs. Time to look elsewhere
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From ANON - Anon on September 25, 2013
Excellent work, eagerly anticipateing more.
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From ANON - Jazz on August 05, 2013
I love your story and can't wait for when you get enough time to continue it.
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From ANON - Unlimted POOOOWWEERR on July 22, 2013
I hope that your still continuing this story since this was amazing when I first found it and I didn't even bother stop reading it until I got up to your most recent updates...so please continue this as I want to see more of this glory that you putting together
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From NightEye on May 31, 2013
...Wow. Just...wow. This story is really freaking good. Keep up the good work man! Dammit, why doesn't this site have an story update alert system...
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From ANON - Hard Science on May 31, 2013
Great job. Massive as expected.
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From ANON - Anon on May 30, 2013
Wow. To be honest, I was starting to get scared that this was going to deadfic. Which would've been an epic bummer.

So, one thing that keeps itching at the back of my mind... Luka is now a competent lover instead of a bumbling virgin. His attitude is also good about actual sex, so...

I'm wondering if somewhere down the line, he'd offer to please Alice sexually? I get that she's eating and probably enjoying it quite a lot, but I'm pretty sure Luka definitely wouldn't hesitate to ask to return the favor at some point. Even if it didn't come to actual penetration, because of a few other things we know about Alice, I imagine there's plenty of ways they could entertain eachother. Personally, one of the most satisfying things to me is if the girl's enjoying themselves, and given how thoughtful Luka appears to be, I can't imagine he'd be that much different. Especially given how hard he tried to please Sophie.

Aaaaaand that's my two cents. Sorry if you were already planning on addressing this.

Also this chapter was awesome! Keep up the good work man!
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From ANON - OrangeFlame on May 28, 2013
Good news! Chapter 11 is out, and will be hitting here soon! Or you could go to http://monstergirlunlimited.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=812&hilit=Monster+Girl+Saga&start=500 and view it now. Also message from the author quoted from
http://roguetranslations.wordpress.com/2013/05/23/mgq3-official-release-date/
"Chapter 11 of Monster Girl Saga has been fully proofread, and is now available on Monstergirl Unlimited and The Fanfiction Forum. I will wait to see if the people there spot any typos, then upload it on AFF, make part of my Google folder public and link to the folder so people can go ahead and see all the chapters in one convenient location.

Those of you who have access to the two forums, have fun! And do let me know if you like, either here or (preferably) on the forums. I know it can be inconvenient to sign up, but it�s free, and it�d make it much easier to contact me. I�ll still check here for as long as this blog lives, though."
Since I have checked here daily, and these "reviews" seem to be the easiest way to post on the chapters, thought I'd pass on the message. WOOO Chap 11!
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From PyroJohn19 on May 14, 2013
I just now got into the MGQ series. And was going to write a story that basically stole your idea. I didn't mean to come up with the same idea of Luka having a monster companion to train him from youth. So, I apologize that we had the same idea. But, since you had it first, I have a request. Can I write a one shot chapter based off your story that is a fanfiction of your fanfiction? I was very inspired by the idea of the four bandits promising to be the brides of Luka. And how Theramdor mentioned that monsters mature faster than humans. So, my thought was Alice transports Luka two months after his children had hatched back to Ilias. But, they accidentally transported in the middle of Po's craft shed. There is Tyris in the middle of changing into a more appealing brassiere. When she notices him and he notices her suddenly developing. What he didn't know was that the previous week was the week of the purple moon, which not only makes some women into succubi. But, also give a giant growth spurt to several monsters across the world. Oh, and do you mind if I add two new harpies, visiting harpies from their own harpy villages on the main continent? The phoenix and Thunderbird harpies? Maybe to settle a possible harpy war, Sophie uses her husband's point of view of no war is good war to settle their differences?
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