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From HenshinDaisuke on June 08, 2013
Great chapter, worth the wait for sure.

Will be interesting to see if Ami's old friend reappears again soon for more visits.
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From HenshinDaisuke on January 24, 2013
Howdy, not quite finished with the chapter at this point but I did notice something so I decided to open a new Tab and start on the review as I read lol.

So the other test subject, is their name Abaea or Ebaea? because I noticed four time where the name shows up as both.

A lil further in the story. Why is it any time somebody looks in a box I get the feeling there are some very interesting times ahead.

Oh a box of lube, rope and some toys...Interesting times ahead indeed lol.

Okay just finished, rather good chapter all around. I think it would be nice to maybe get Kate and Fost involved with Sam an Ami a bit too, you could always give them a night out at a motel or something. Maybe have them switch up partners.

Oh and ya the Username we have is .Burst lol I had forgotten that my brother had changed it some time ago.
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From HenshinDaisuke on January 23, 2013
Hey, no new review this time around. Mostly because there isn't a new chapter yet lol, seems life has taken you away from the site for a bit. No worries though Starting to re-read the story from the start, just as good as the first time around.

(oh and I also sent you a friend request on Steam this morning, the username ought to be bigzeldafan...don't as lol it's a shared username with my younger brother.)
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From HenshinDaisuke on December 30, 2012
A decent chapter, if a little short. Starting to feel a little bad about not being fond of Seliha, though not quite bad enough to start to like her.

Oh and ya I had been thinking of Fosanta in my last review lol. I think putting her in a position of control over somebody for a week might be fun, or maybe putting her and Kate in the control of somebody else. Maybe giving Silana a chance to be in charge of somebody would be a nice switch up for her.
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From HenshinDaisuke on December 27, 2012
I'm getting the feeling that Seliha is going to have some kind of major meltdown soon-ish, which could be rather interesting to see really. Makes me wonder if you plan to write out one of her personalities or merge them together maybe, it would make for an interesting bit of subplot to have her grieving for the loss of one of the personalities as though it were a sibling.

I think that Lianta and Hymara are the most developed of the bodyguards but they still don't get much in the way of "screen time" really. Would be interesting to get a bit of a short chapter from their point of view, maybe walk the reader through their day and the thoughts they have while trying to keep Sam out of trouble. Maybe seeing what their days off are like? Just something to think on.

I was thinking it might be nice for Kate to have another go at being in charge, could be interesting to give her Silana for a week to see how things turn out.
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From HenshinDaisuke on December 22, 2012
Great chapter, the long wait was definitely worth it.

So first bit to think on, I rather like that Sam isn't able to just blend in with his co-workers where ever he goes to. Though the floor manager or whatever she is called seems to be a little bit of a witch, kind of hope you at some point get her killed off by somebody. (Not killed by Ami though as I think that might darker her too much.)

The bio-amp testing seems to be an interesting sub-plot so far, wondering what Ami will paint hers to look like, I would guess she will try to get it to match her markings best she can.

Oh and the sub-plot of the "mystery person" sending them things, would be nice to be able to see them again for a bit, hard to recall but I think it was her step-'father' or something ya? The Asari that ended up with her Mother or something? I really have a hard time recalling anymore for some reason.

I wonder when we might see Kate's "mind-room" again I vaguely remember it being around once but it is so hard to recall too far back. I'm going to have to do a re-read on the story soon to get all the info straightened out in my head.

Anyway great chapter, hope the next one is just as good.
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From HenshinDaisuke on October 27, 2012
I do rather enjoy the longer chapters lol. I feel like I ought to know what bonfire night is but I do not ^^;

Anyway thoughts on the story...

I am rather enjoying the build up to getting Kate and Fostana to be bondmates. Would be interesting to see the inside of her mind once more at some point I vaguely remember seeing it once...maybe hard to recall.

I think that keeping Silana around is a good way to help catch up readers on early events, since the characters can explain things to her that we may have forgotten about. Such has names of characters we aint seen in some 30 or so chapters lol, oh and I think it would be nice to involve her more in some of the interactions between Sam and Ami, maybe get her to meld with Sam once or twice.

I still don't much like the dominate half of Seliha, I liked her more at the start before the duality syndrome thing but maybe the point was to make her a little unlikable then build her back up. I'm not sure but if you are going that route it would be good to start making it easier to tell which of her is the one speaking as they don't seem to differ in speech patterns much.

The story could always use more Adastra though, I can not say enough good things about her. I really rather miss the interactions between her and Sam maybe you ought to give them a day out together to go shopping or something, ya know catch up on things and get to work on that danged engine some more lol. It seems like the story was to revolve around her and Sam then Ami got introduce and the plot took a right turn down a new hall wall making us forget there was the whole rest of the house to see yet lol.

Anyway I'm rambling a bit aren't I?

Enjoyed the new chapter, looking forward to seeing if Ami keeps the marking on her face or not.
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From HenshinDaisuke on October 06, 2012
Been a nice few chapters, I have enjoyed getting to see the moving process and get to know Silana a little better, I don't like...blast what was the new character's name? from Sentix...Olissa? Anyway very unlikable type though I gather that was the point.
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From HenshinDaisuke on September 08, 2012
It does rather seem like you enjoy putting Sam in awkward positions, doesn't it?

I enjoyed this chapter, it does seem I don't have much to say about it though so I apologize. I may wait a few weeks before reading again as I tend to have more to say after reading multiple chapters rather than just one...Or maybe it's when the chapters are longer ( :P ) Either way it seems when there is less to read my comments aren't as helpful.

I wondered though when we might get to see some of the characters that have gone off to other planets and the like, such as....blast I forget the commandos name now lol the one that crashed with Adrasta.

Anyway, I do rather hope we get to see some little blue children appearing at some point, even if it is just inside Sam or Kate's minds as a result of some test from their mates.
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From HenshinDaisuke on September 02, 2012
A nice chapter, Ami is coming a bit more out of her shell eh?

Looking forward to the next one.

No need to worry about the lateness of the chapter, the real world comes first.

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From ANON - Cookie on September 01, 2012
Damn! I love a story with plot, just taking a min to tell u I love your story, keep it up!
Please!!!!
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From HenshinDaisuke on August 23, 2012
Lovely chapter, the new apartment sounds like an interesting place. I'm not sure how to feel about the new servant yet but I'm sure she will grow on me in time, Looking forward to the next chapter.

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From HenshinDaisuke on August 20, 2012
I rather like this chapter, it feels slower than the rest which is good sometimes to just let the characters have down time and with Ami being ill it makes things really feel like they have slowed. I'm not sure why but it feels like the story tends to revolve more around Sam and Ami's life together than the rest of the characters lately. Might do some good to take the focus away from them for a little bit and let somebody else have the lime light for a little while.
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From HenshinDaisuke on August 12, 2012
I am rather addicted to this story, it is a shame it's only updated once a week but I know people have lives outside the interwebs.

Anyway, I rather dislike Seliha, or the darker bits of her anyway. I do look forward to seeing what becomes of Sam and Ami when they get their new place. I wonder if the bodyguards will finally get upgraded from background/side characters and placed into more of the story. Oh and I was wondering when we might see the inside of Sam's mind yet again, I wonder how more of Ami's past might effect the look of the place. If Sam might make more changes depending on the over all effect the memories have on him or if Ami might end up making some changes herself without him noticing.
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From HenshinDaisuke on August 04, 2012
I rather enjoy the little plot twist of the investigation, though it makes me wonder how things will go next. Ami being given some more freedom is a nice idea too, i do wonder though if she will try to take advantage of it a little at some point. Also wondering when Kate and Fosanta might end up having themselves some little blue children.
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