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Reviews for Justifiable Homicide

By : DarkLaraJade
  • From ANON - Anon on August 02, 2015
    No updates yet?! PLEASE DON'T ABANDON THIS STORY!!
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  • From ANON - Ricky22 on February 27, 2015
    Oh, don't tell me this story has been forgotten and/or abandoned!!
    I am loving it!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 25, 2015
    Why will this story not continue?
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 20, 2014
    Hello? *Hears echo*

    Is this story (and its writer) still alive?
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 01, 2014
    well its good to see this story continue. As I am a sucker for a good tragedy, id love for the galaxy to find out hat the krogan are doing and be like "fuck that" and gather the victory fleet once again and go and kick some krogan ass. maybe even have hackett or garrus kill shepard. of course it be really emotional but i cannot see the krogan building an empire being taken very well. Or maybe go the peaceful route of the newly formed empire under Shepard's and Wrex's rule offer much needed aid to the crippled galaxy and the council granting them a seat for all their hard work. Just so many ways this could play out. I cant wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 04, 2013
    Dont know if I'm the only person, but with all of Tali's hard work, I think it's only fair she gets rewarded with a couple Krogan dicks.
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  • From ANON - Brian Dooley on March 04, 2013
    Nice job in the explaination for the pregnancies. Not to sure if it is scientifically accurate but who cares! Also did you get my PM on Fanfiction.net. I think you should try a T-rex or raptor look for the babies. And give the female ones boobs. Just saying. Please update soon.
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  • From ANON - brian dooley on January 25, 2013
    I like this story. It has its inconsistances, but plot in porn of any king is a bonus. I would suggest reading the Mass Effect wiki more closely. Also Please Update Soon!!!
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  • From newenglandee on November 30, 2012
    Well, its good to see Nova's still trying to do the right thing and keep innocent people from being hurt. But there are a few things that bug me.

    1. Wrex's plan. I'm gonna go with what Sirius said. Humans aren't ASARI, you can't just expect to magic up some way for them to bear Krogan children. Well, maybe they could have, but you blew out the brains of the only one who might have known a way.
    2. Sometimes a cigar is just a cigar. It would be funny if the Citadel honestly WAS just giving out food rations solely for, y'know, the purpose of knowing how many people there are and for building up morale in their citizens, and not for any sort of sinister context. Not everything big government does is bad.
    3. The Geth. Just...okay. The Geth. Who were, I remind you, all about self-determination and building their own future...are now helping a race ENSLAVE others. Does the term "hypocrisy" not register at ALL?
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  • From Alleyway_Ravager on November 29, 2012
    I see you are taking Shepard down the "accepting slavery" route. I already mentioned I didn't find this really believable but, for the sake of the story, I can accept it.

    Nice to see Shepard come into command the way she is, how she handles the diplomatic ties with the Batarians and settles Wrex down.

    That was clever with the food transport and the census. I'm really interested in what she exactly plans to do with that information and of course, seeing human women brought in as slaves!

    Another good chapter!
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  • From Alleyway_Ravager on November 26, 2012
    I was pretty pleased to see Chapter 11 out. I think you might have mentioned me in your thanks? Not sure, but I hope my comments helped regardless!

    First off: Hooray Erica! I was actually expecting something a bit more...hard...on her, but that was too funny. I think she's going to be ok, definitely liked how she put that Krogan in his place. Looking forward to seeing more of her.

    Sex-wise: Good as always! Though like Nova I too was angry at Mirah for interrupting. Would love to see a scene with Nova punishing her slave, heh heh heh. Also noticed Nova yelling at her slaves more. Seems she might be getting used to the idea.

    Story: Now that is the Shepard we know! Assertive and on the case! Glad she is going to try the peaceful option while still making the guilty pay. I'm rooting for her.i also enjoyed the conversations between her and Miranda. I know you said you want to keep the story from being easy to predict and I will tell you I am excited to see where you take it!

    Overall: good "lighter" chapter as you put it. Helps break up the tension from the previous couple. Looking forward to the next update.

    Oh, and one little PS: I enjoyed the suggestions you gave in your authors comments for fan-fiction and other things to check out. If you know any other good Krogan stories (especially with a little non-con) I'd love to see them!


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  • From ANON - Newenglandee on November 24, 2012
    The PROPER response is "What you're doing is hypocritical, engaging in the same terrible practices you condemned your enemies for, ENSLAVING innocent women and RAPING them, and now you want to take over the galaxy out of misguided fear for your people. Two wrongs don't make a right, you should be ashamed of yourself, and fuck you and the varren you rode in on, you morally corrupt MAGGOT."
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  • From Alleyway_Ravager on November 23, 2012
    So, first off I see this only has 9 reviews! Unfortunate.

    First off, the sex: Very nice. As a fan of non-con and reluctance stories myself I found them quite invigorating. Hope to see more females added to the mix soon. The idea of slave girls being brought in to be impregnated...very exciting!

    Now the story: Picked up on a good number of grammar and simple spelling mistakes. A little more proof-reading would help.

    As for the story...well, like I said I'm a fan of non-con type situations but even I have a few problems with what is happening. Even with Shepard's mental state I can't see her condoning slavery in any fashion. I really hope to see her in fighting condition soon and being the hero she once was, putting a stop to injustice on both sides (Take that paragon option!). Even if she is siding with Wrex and wants to help him rebuild/create his own alliance I hope she kicks some ass for a peaceful resolution.

    You have some good details and ideas here. About the state of the galaxy after the reapers, the effects of there being no Mass Relays, the poverty, food shortages. You obviously did some thinking on that, well done.

    PLEASE don't send Erica back to the Batarians! She is actually one of my favorite characters despite the small part she has played. I can feel her pain, her position as a infertile slave, the life she's lead up until then. I really hope she wasn't just brought into the story be punished. Of course it's your story so I can only hope for Erica finding some peace (maybe she and Lita can make up. Both could use a friend), but I hope you'll think about!

    So I hope this review encourages you to keep writing! I hope to review each chapter as it comes out now.

    I'd also like to offer my skills as a proof-reader, if you like. My email is: alleywaym@ymail.com
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  • From ANON - Terrak on October 13, 2012
    Still decently written, although given how long Miranda has been in the series and she's yet to be featured in any sex scenes, it's starting to get a little boring with just Shepard getting any, and Miranda just getting the occasional joke directed at her behavior.
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  • From ANON - Terrak on September 11, 2012
    Right, so, uh... aside from the fact that this story is pretty much "Derher, whaa waaah, giant krogan dicks, orgazmmmms" it's decently written. Although seeing as you did at least reference Lair of the Shadow Broker, I feel like I should point out that Miranda being included as Wreav's 'tang of choice is a little, uh, pointless. Miranda is sterile.
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