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Reviews for Slaves of Cerberus

By : NakedOwlMan
  • From ANON - on January 21, 2017

    For those interested, this story also appears on Archive Of Our Own with an extra chapter. That final chapter explains why the author has stepped away fro writing this story with a link to a notes file of what would have happened...


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  • From ANON - Anon on May 20, 2016
    I miss this story
    :(
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 01, 2016
    KEEP GOING! KEEP GOING!
    One of my favorite stories.
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  • From ANON - David on February 01, 2016
    END!!! JUST END!!!
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  • From maverick1234 on October 12, 2015
    Hello love the story a lot. But i have a question for you now. Which is how do i post a story to this site. I am a new member to this site and i am trying to figure out how i post a story could you please help me out here with this
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  • From mty14 on September 30, 2015
    The most valid, necessary criticism you've received was from somebody else on LJ like 30+ chapters ago, and it's still true to this day. Although, to be fair, you have done some things to address it.

    And that is: every single character in this story not named Ashley/Morgan or in the Shepard/Brooks/Liara love square is treated like absolute background noise. Half the time they barely even have individual lines, much less focused scenes.

    Take someone like Miranda for example. She was a very, very minor part of the orgy before they arrived. She was also somehow mind-boggingly a sidekick to Kelly/Kasumi's voyeurism (??? why?) in her own sex scene with Oriana. Before that she got used in the threesome with Brooks and Henneman, which was very well done, but was unfortunately the only time in the story she's gotten a decently focused sex scene. That happened 80 chapters ago by the way. Nothing really much since then.

    She was literally unheard from for pretty much the entire rest of the story (almost 100 chapters after her appearance). I thought Miranda was a good example to use because she's someone you have done some correction on, as I said. The Cordelia thing was obviously something you've had planned for a while and as a result Miranda/Oriana have gotten much more development lately in the last ~20 chapters or so, even if their sexual content is still lacking. Like, it's a decent start, as long as you keep going. I hope I can see other characters like Miranda, like Oriana, like Jack (she has a foreshadowed sex scene coming) be put more to use not only in sex scenes (which is what we all come to read anyway) but plot relevance and focus.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 05, 2015
    Too much oral, not enough anal, between Morgan and Ashley.
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  • From ANON - boldfullmetal on March 23, 2015
    I know I'm gonna catch a lot of flack for saying this. But can you please for the love of all that is pure and holy, start wrapping this epic of yours up?

    It's not that i don't enjoy reading all the raunchy and sadistic things you do to a beloved cast of ME characters, (cause I really do) It's just that this fic feels like it's starting to spiral out of control with so many new plot lines without wrapping up the old ones first.

    I mean I was game when jacob's team ambushed the cerberus fuckers and killed a lot of them, (thought that would be a good point to start the conclusion) But then the whole omega arc (though very well written) seemed purposefully tacked on at the end. I get that this is your story, but it feels like it's entered purgatory. (not the bar) Like literal purgatory. For every step foreword our captured and enslaved hero's make, its like they get violently thrown back three. While this does give you a lot of themes and motifs to explore, it's starting to turn me off as a reader cause with every new update, I feel like a happy ending is less and less likely. At times I feel like I gotta power through some chapters and arcs because I wanna get back to the meat of the story.

    IDK, maybe I'm just conflicted at loving a fic with such dark themes... It just feels like it needs to start getting wrapped up. I mean, you are fantastic at creating interesting and engaging plots like: Omega, third lawson sister, kelly's turmoil, ash's turmoil, leyzon's turmoil, Kasumi's turmoil, EDI's reactivation, the questioning cerberus civilians wondering about what goes on in the restricted center... ect. And I'll punch anyone who says you don't know how to create drama!

    It's just that this story has started steering way too far into the deep dark end for my liking. And the more I read I can't help but wonder, WHERE THE EVER LOVING FUCK IS THE COUNCIL! WHERE ARE THE OTHER SPECTRE'S! WHY IS EVERYONE STANDING AROUND WITH THEIR DICK IN THEIR HANDS WHILE CERBERUS GROWS IN POWER! WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON WITH JACOBS CREW? AND WHAT THE HELL IS THE REAL SHEPARD AND LIARA DOING?... You see how with every chapter this story asks the reader to suspend their disbelief?

    Man, I don't know.

    I'm not saying you should wave your wand and clear everything up. Just that it would be nice for their to be some pay-off for the readers for the amount of time they stick with you.

    (Last criticism, I promise.)

    And could you please limit turning your villians into supermen. By this I mean that every time I read about our hero's planning something to combat their foes, you go and have cerberus laugh in their faces saying "Oh, you gonna try this... Well bam! fuck you, we win."

    (tirade over)

    For all the faults I've mentioned, I really do love this story, and because of that love, feel the need to comment.

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  • From ANON - Anon on February 09, 2015
    Cordelia Lawson? How interesting.

    And the Ashley/Morgan relationship continues to be the most developed in the entire story.

    Wish we had more Brooks.

    Nice update. I like that we always get 5-6 chapters at once.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 18, 2015
    You have put a lot of effort into this story. It can be a little hard to follow at times since there are so many characters; almost like A Song of Ice and Fire. lol. But it really is well written.

    Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Tokeria on December 21, 2014
    Man when there be new update of this story.....
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  • From ANON - Letina on December 19, 2014
    Well story so far look cool just when do you plan to put new chapter ? I hope you don't plan to stop updating now after so many chapters...
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  • From ANON - Salty as hell on December 17, 2014
    Maybe have Ashley do try to have Kasumi as her's too.
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  • From ANON - Salty as hell on December 17, 2014
    Keep up on Ashley's perspective please!
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  • From ANON - ZeoUnit on December 16, 2014
    The story is nice and I like it so far, hope you will not stop the updates.
    I'm really interested to see what will happen next with Kelly and rest of them.
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