Glad to see you're back! I enjoyed the last chapter thoroughly, some good writing there!

For me personally, I'm looking forward to more Rachel breaking Lara action. Some strapon up the reardoor and boot licking!

I never played DOA (and given the content of the game and the current tone in the gaming world I'd assume there isn't a reboot on the horizon), so the two main characters of this chapter aren't as familiar to me as Miss Croft or Black Widow, which is a bit sad. Apart from that it was a very enjoyable scene, skillfully written as usual. It is going to be interesting to see what you come up with next. I'm hoping for some MF-Lara-action:P

[13] Had me scared a bit that you'd abandoned this story. Glad to be wrong. I'm also surprised you went as far as you did here. I don't know things can still change so I won't say for certain but I was expecting Alister brainwashing thing to neutralize Itagaki's and for Cristie to fake being controlled for a bit. I don't know it would be hotter to me than the whole unconcious thing(Tina) and the forced act(Christie). Would be even hotter if while faking Christie actually got hooked on the pleasure and forgot about the whole thing for a while. But that's just me.

I'm guessing the brainwashed duo is probably going to help free Zip and Lara somehow, so I'm still eager to see what comes next. Hopefully it isn't just a dream again as that would be a bit too much. 

Hello, I was wondering if I could make a story out of Lara blue balling two guys then one of them getting payback.

dead or alive cast meets tomb raider xD

lets see if alistar can come to the rescue fast enough, i fear for Lara!

takedown has been hidden;( i assume too much authors note:D

nice build up chapter

Excited to see where you're going to take it with this man! Glad that you're back!

[12] A little bit slower than the last few chapters but a good installment nonetheless. I'm not into lesbians so the scene didn't really do much for me, aside from showing what has happened to Lara since their initial plan failed. Rachel is looking good in this role, as she didn't get to do it much in the games. Really curious as to how Alister is gonna start(if) the comeback. Hope it's all sort of sexy cool action, because I got that wolverine vibe from the hellfire club arc on X-men. Alister isn't much of an action hero, but he may just be able to pull it out. Hopefully soon.

chapter 11 - For my part zip filled laras belly with gallons of cum

who cares for the story anyway right?

Definitely disagree with the story "going nowhere". I really enjoyed this chapter. Kind of predicted the denied happy ending because that's what you seem to do lately. Got to admit though that I am left a little confused now. Did the "Origin chapters" really happen? If they did, how did Zip still have blue balls after basically getting full control of Lara? But if it is just a fantasy it seems odd for Alistair to get a prominent role in Lara's wet dream. Seemed a little like a spontaneous decision to tie story strings together like this.

Anyway, apart from that, I gotta applaud you. Despite Zip being unable to cum the story/action-ratio looks a lot better here. The oral action was very well-written as usual, the mental imagery it provoked was immensely pleasant. I am definitely going to read it again.

Zip must really need to get his rocks off if he's including Alister in his sexual fantasies. Either way that was a nice if a little cliche transition into the present day situation, which honestly was almost entirely forgotten about given how detailed the last few chapters have been. If it wasn't obvious by now, this story's built on a foundation of pure cocktease and I don't doubt there's more of that to come with Zip's interrogation. Looking forward to seeing the tangle Lara's got herself caught up in too. Till next time.

Excited to see what comes next! 

[11] Well played good sir! I can't say that I saw it coming until Lara started acting so different than the rest of the series but by then I was just a few paragraphs from the reveal. I love the surprise factor this chapter had and coupled with the awesome BJ scene made this chapter an incredible treat. Now one has to ask how fucked up are Zips dreams that he involves Alister in-depth tease into them =D

More than ever I'm hooked on the story. A little sad that when the guys finally start to "fight" Lara's fire with fire, it was all a dream but if it has to go that way at least it will be glorious if we're treated to even more awesome chapters like this one. Keep up the good work!

theres just too much teasing. the story isnt going anywhere. its going backward. sorry. you write awesome but i think i'm done after this chapter. i'll give future stories you write a chance tho

Loved the new chapter! Her teasing is so hot, and the way she's basically torturing Zip is amazing. I also loved the part about her secretly wanting him to snap and just take her.

Can't wait for the next one!

Sex scenes are overrated and they are everywhere. What do you have in 99% of smut stories out there? Lots of sex and very little teasing. To the point where you don't care about the sex because there's nothing leading up to it.

Well in this story you have the opposite. Lots of teasing and very little sex. I find that quite refreshing honestly and to me personally it is more than satisfactory. I actually prefer teasing scenes, seduction scenes, and blowjob scenes to the typical sex scene. I find the former compelling and the latter dull.

Evidently many people absolutely enjoy your writing style and the actual content of your story, so I hope you don't change it for the few moaners out there who just want some wham bam thank you ma'am. As if they can't find that literally everywhere else.