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Reviews for Heart of Darkness

By : modeac
  • From ANON - on July 18, 2016

    You should put this on fanfiction.net


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  • From ANON - on July 12, 2016

    I get the feeling that Aria is just making more problems for herself on the long run. Sure at this point she could care less about it but if things turn around it could end up really bad for her. Any chance you will continue this story? Would not mind to see more of this alternative world.


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  • From ANON - ZiBeX on June 21, 2016
    Cool Scenes man. I like the action so far. Any plans to make more of it? Would be cool to see How this alternative world works and some more info on how did Shepard got to this point here. If possible show us from Aria point of view why Shepard. It sure as hell that some of the other mercs dont know why Shepard get more money then them and are not fine with it.
    Although I like the second chapter the first one had more background. Cant wait to see in what way will Shepard get back at her cruel Mistress as the story progress.
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  • From ZeoUnit on June 21, 2016
    Ok the flow of story looks ok. In first chapter we got some info how Shepard got to this position and in second we got to see what is the current situation and relationship between those two.
    I hope you will continue with this one and expand on this current settings since so far i didn't seen any on this subject or at least in this setup.

    You could maybe expand the "character rooster" by showing us what other mercs are working for Aria, what kind of relationship Shepard's have with them.
    Maybe show us what kind of jobs she do or maybe some of the secret connection Shepard got to make with people while she does Aria's odd jobs.
    It would be logical that base on how Aria is treating Shepard that after some time some of the rival "gangs" would try to get Katsu on their side or try to at least get info. With that Katsu is currently going trough i would not be surprise if something happens. I can totally see that at some point after some plots and twist give or take, Aria's and Katsu's positions change,maybe even create situation that would show that Aria to some degree cares for her "property" and that leads to her show as weak and lose omega maybe and needs to go in hiding or just get "downgraded" after rebel or something. How would Katsu do things if she by chance get in control of the Omega, cant say, but it would put nice twist and interesting moment on how would she deal with "rebels gangs" that would try to take control with Aria "out of the way".

    A lot of possible ways to expand on your current point of the story so I really hope you will not just finish it here or just entirely focus on sex scenes(they are nice but still) and try to expand with story progression with twist and subplots here and there.
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