Reviews for A Final ChallengeBy : JLDavenport |
Jeez Robin, you act like you're the good guy when you're the one two timing, four timing, every timing everyone. By all accounts, you should be killed, but the stamina and mighty cock of yours helps out. And maybe luck.
I like Cynthia and Severa's relationship, but I was always annoyed by how they acted like they never knew one another. Severa and Cynthia knew one another since they were kids, and Severa even pointed out that Cynthia used to be the girliest of the bunch, but then stopped when Sumia was killed. But the way they talked, it sounded like they didn't know each other at all.
Also, it's a tad odd that you end it with Cordelia and Lucina, when Cordelia is the 1st Gen character. How is she gonna react when she learns that he's also fucking her daughter?
Well, based on your other fics, he just dominates them both and makes them be his bitches, so it works out.
Also, didn't mention this, but I like how you include that Cynthia and Sumia have large tits, as I always thought that was the case too. Not as big as Tharja's, but definitely big in their own right, since she's meant to be a foil for Cordelia, as while Cordelia is a prodigy, Sumia is the clutz, and while Cordelia is flat, Sumia is busty.
That was pretty funny though for Robin I doubt even the two slim beauties at the end would be his final challenge. Gotta say Severa and Cythnia sure make a nice contrasting pair.
Holy kek. I feel like Robin stole Chrom's accidental S-Rank ability. Do you have any plans of a followup for this, or is this just a one-time deal. Either way, great work as usual.
Cynthia story.
Cynthia.
I am so happy.
And then Severa appeared and I cried.
The ending made me laugh a little. Solid as usual, but I would recommend that you use less commas. It feels like most sentences just run on and on, and the overall sentence fluency of the piece suffers for it. It's something I've noticed in most of your other work as well.
Hey! Before I review, I just wanna say how much I realky do enjoy your writing~ ^^ I've been watching your work since the beginning of ACOT, which, by the way, is great! You honestly encouraged me to make this account as possibly begin writing again ^^ but for this comission, the way you write each character was well done. Severa and Cynthia are a personal favorite, so I'm happy to see thei inclusion x3 overall, great work; as always! Keeo writing, and stay kinky!~ -Wobin
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