Reviews for The IT Guy: A Tomb Raider StoryBy : Eroticwriter101 |
very enticing! love the build up.
when are you going to post the next chapter?
I can not help, there is no sex scene, and I'm really enjoying this story! Lara is so interesting character and sooo hot. I love the dominant Lara, which have everything under control. Maybe Jason could have more dreams and imagination and some monitoring by cameras.
Good second chapter, building on what we've seen before, showing us what's going on in our lead's head and setting up opportunities without blowing the chance way too soon.
Nice.
I really like this portryal of Lara, she's in control, dominant and is clearly no idiot. She knows exactly what's going on with Jason, teases him but never pushes it too far. I like that. You've not degraded her or given her blind spots in order to make a relationship seem plausable.
Jason's also enjoyable to read, he makes mistakes but is not a dead weight and clearly has expertise that he can use to be useful/impress Lara and garuntee he stays around without you bending over backwards to explain why.
Looking forward to this "training" that Lara has planned for him, I imagine it will be tough for Jason to keep up, while keeping his mind of Lara's curves. Who knows maybe she can find ways to motivate him? Thanks for giving Winston presence and not making the manor feel empty.
All in all a great second chapter, you're still building up things and I feel this will payoff in the long run than racing to the dirty stuff. No real complaints at all other than some similar language was used in descriptions of Lara that can be found in other fics on this site. You're own writing style is easy to read and enjoyable.
All the best till next time.
The second chapter I like. I'm glad Lara is not just a victim of sexual violence but she's acting like a real Lara Croft. One question. Will have Jason an hour of swimming with Lara? You could describe her perfect body in bikini. I really like classic version of Lara Croft.
Finally interesting story form Croft Manor. Lara as TOP Lady. The story about IT guy looks very promising. The introduction was great looking forward to the next chapter.
I hope the hacker will be secretly watch Lara in the shower, other rooms, and the other people inside manor interacting with her. I really enjoyed the first chapter. Please soon the second part. Big thumb up.
Nice first chapter.
You set up who the main is, explained his situation and introduced him to Lara all in one go without it feeling rushed.
Minor chritisisim is that I think the POV shifted at one point to first person but I only saw this once so it is easily corrected and did not spoil anything.
Looking forward to the next part of your story.
Anticiapting what comes next, though hopefully the geek will be the dominant one. I dont like femme-domme unless it's over another girl.
I hope you continue
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