Reviews for Mass Effect: VengeanceBy : Unaplicable |
Okay, first of all I feel like this could do with another pass, there's some mistakes (like, you initially describe the Batarian as raping the asari's vagina, only to then say it was her asshole instead, and stick to that) and some of the descriptions are a little repetitive (you nearly always describe her breasts as being a DD-cup, which personally I don't think is a very good way of describing them in general).
Aside from that, I actually found myself pleasantly surprised. The entire part in chapter two where the Batarian is looking over the helpless Asari I thought was very good, the descriptions in that part were excellent. Found myself hoisting the colours during the part where he's playing with her ass and fingering her. Likewise I enjoyed the description of how her body reacts to him fucking her ass, with her muscles clenching up and everything.
Furthermore, I thought the start of the story, with the space battle and the boarding operation were rather interesting, I honestly could've stood to see more of that. Perhaps explain why the Asari attempt to engage the Kett they meet with swords instead of just blasting it from the outset.
I hope you plan on continuing this, as I'd be keen on seeing where it goes.
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