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Reviews for Frødenn

By : Driznar
  • From Ahjenta on October 03, 2021

    I am a great fan of bldangl0's Diablo stories here, so I am really excited to see someone contributes to his story setting, with his blessing no less. This chapter is a good start, introducing the main character and establishing the story framework. I am interested to see where it goes from here.

    One thing you can expand on is setup and paid off. Some of the actions in this chapter feels too rushed. Frødenn walks into the Rogue Camp and heads to Charsi, and his first action is to play with her hair and touch her ears? I don't think Charsi or Kashya would put up with that kind of behavior from a total stranger.

    Also, Charsi seems too willing to tell her secret to Frødenn. Her tryst with the Smith could get her exiled from the Rogue Camp at best, but far more likely to be killed outright. This is the kind of secret that Frødenn needs to work to discover himself. It will make for a more satisfying story.


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  • From bldangl0 on May 29, 2021

    I have no problems with the story, go ahead and keep it up! I never thought I'd inspire someone, hope you have fun writing.


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