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Reviews for The Oath

By : Eeveefreak
  • From yoshickento on April 10, 2008
    This is a good story. I look forward to the next chapter
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  • From xanvega on March 10, 2007
    This has the potential to be good but you should spell check or better yet, have some one beta the story for you. Spelling and grammer mistakes can really be off-putting. It would also be nice if you would stick to one pov or at least say who's point of view it's from, the second chapter threw me for a long while until I realized who it was.

    Keep up the work
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  • From ANON - Kuroi Yasha on August 01, 2006
    I have to say that this is a really good story. Unfortunately, not every fan fic that is posted is reviewed. Hopefully this won't keep you from writting more chapters. Keep up the good work and don't let the lack of reviews get you down.
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  • From ANON - Kirie on January 15, 2006
    Very good
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  • From ANON - Theonna on January 13, 2006
    Please update. I want to know what the other dares are.
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  • From ANON - KKz on December 25, 2005
    Ooh, more dares, more!! =P Hmm, what about a dare that both girls hav to do together? =P
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  • From BrianChattillon on October 06, 2005
    Interesting I read upto the second dare scenario.

    If this is HM AWL then I have to regretfully inform you that Lumina is an ONLY child!
    If this is NOT HM A Wonderful Life themn I appologise and will shut my cakehole.

    All and all shaping up to be a good fiction peice
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 30, 2005
    what is an 'organism' in a sexual context? I think you mean orgasm...
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  • From ANON - ??? on April 09, 2005
    Continue please, I can give a good review if the story is so short!
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  • From ANON - YoukoKitsune on March 27, 2005
    well i think this fic has potential and of course it would be nice to see it continue on i hate to see a fic die
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  • From ANON - PikaBot on March 15, 2005
    For one thing, stick with one narrator. Having a jumping POV(EVen between chapters) is something I've seen done well exactly once, and it was by a phenomenal author.

    For another, I'm not sure you understand basic anatomy very well. I would recommend you bone up(no pun intended) on the subject before continuing to write.
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  • From ANON - vury happy on December 07, 2004
    This was a nyce fic though the thought of a thirteen year old child in theses situations is rather disturbing..i still really enjoyed this fic. keeo up the grood work ^^
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 27, 2004
    Write more!
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 26, 2004
    Hey, not a bad HM fic...only one thing's confusing me and keeping me from enjoying it. Which HM is this from???
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  • From ANON - TheDarkOne on October 23, 2004
    ok. farily decent. is this ur first fic?

    -The Dark One
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