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From ANON - Storm on April 04, 2011
Hey I've been following the story for the last few years, I have to say its the best DW story I've read. That's why it makes me sad to see the first chapters are all messed up looking. I would love to reread the story again and hopefully you will fix the broken chapters.
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From ANON - Eva Unit-U on January 12, 2006
An update! w00t! I nearly forgot to check back, this was a very enjoyable chapter, not only did we Ling completely off guard for once we also see some good writing in the council scene. Keep it up and update soon.
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From ANON - Katrin on October 25, 2005
Wow^^ I must say your new homepage is pretty amazing just like the last chapter of Lunar Spear. I love your story that's one of the best I've ever read. I'm glad Ling finally made it to confess her love to Dun and pretty excieted of what he will reply. I hope the next chapter will come soon because I'm looking forward to read it^^! Uhm, if I've done some mistakes with my writing I'm sorry, my English is not good enough^^""
The story is great so go on writing and post the next chapter soon, I'm sure it will be as same great as the last ine was.
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From ANON - HarborRat on October 09, 2005
I fixed the problem with Chapter 25, it is now "A little Help from Our Friends" like it was originally intended. I'm sorry for the confusion, I have such bad luck with editing/uploading and maintaining formatting here.
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From ANON - Eva Unit-U on October 06, 2005
Another great ch, but you repuloaded the ch 24 text as ch 25...a repeat.. =( I hope we didn't miss anything...
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From ANON - Big Samurai on October 03, 2005
Greetings. :-) I am the Big Samurai, and I have been a fan of ROT3K ― and, by extension, the Sangoku Musou franchise ― for many years. There might be fans that have issues regarding the interpretation of ROT3K that the Sangoku Musou games present, but there are also fans like me who find that interpretation very refreshing. If I have one complaint about the original book, it is that it contains almost too many characters, reducing most of them to two-dimensional generals having little more than names and minor actions ... normally resulting in their deaths. The games then take those characters and start adding depth to them. In order to write fanfic for the games, then, it falls to the writer to go the distance and add enough depth to the characters to bring them fully to life. I must say that you have done exactly that, and I am going to tell you why it works in your story. (Yes, this paragraph is a cut-and-paste from another review of mine, but I like to establish the basics before I go in-depth on a story as long as this one is.)

This story is what initially brought me to the Sangoku Musou section at AFF, to be honest. I was rather shocked to see a fanfic of this size in such a small section, and that piqued my interest from the beginning. After sinking my teeth into the text, I discovered why the story was big: It has a lot to do, and it has a good way to do it. What sets your story apart from almost all of the other SSM4 / DW5 pieces that I have encountered can be summed up in one word: Style. The style makes this story.

Instead of going for the authenticity of the original book or the veneer of the games, you go your own way in interpreting the characters and circumstances of ROT3K, and your vision of it is both very appropriate and very different. The story is dark, gritty, and rough, as are the characters. The generals are bad-tempered, foul-mouthed, and heavy-handed, bringing to life, in a way, the barbarism of the old world, complete with all of its blood, guts, and glory. Though it does seem strange to read modern words coming from the mouths of ancient generals, they all act consistently, and it works. Providing this interpretation while keeping your characters true to themselves is a formidable achievement.

Though the characters are true to themselves, you also go out of your way to show the reader little subtleties about them. Lu Bu might be a brute, but he is also a doting father. At the same time, Xiahou Dun, though as brutal and ruthless as a Wei general ought to be, is also a loving husband, though he takes quite a bit of time ― as he should ― to grow into the role. You also do one thing that I wish more writers would do: You do not shy away from what happened to Diao Chan, filling in that blank as you see fit. Her fate is never described in the book, but her misery, as you present it, seems very plausible, as does her sad, ugly fate. Say what you will about the short life of Lu Bu and his entourage, it had its fine points, and the breaking of those fine points makes its end all the more dramatic.

Death actually deserves a special mention: When you kill off a character, any character, you do it the way it happens in real life. Death in your story is sudden, immediate, unpleasant, and over as quickly as I can snap my fingers. You do not take time to linger on it, and that adds to the in-your-face strength of your story. On top of that, though your story is heavy with violence and death, it is just as heavy with sex, often in association with the violence and death. The sexuality of it is just as in-your-face as the blood and the gore, and, again, that works. You do not sidestep the nastiness of a girl being traded to a general as chattel, yet you explore how that one-sided relationship can develop into more than was expected.

Related to that, I must discuss the character of Lu Ling Qi. (One fun note: I have seen the various pictures of her, and I have the two Tactics games, but, in all honesty, I do not think that her bust is that big.) She is the image of her father, as she should be. If Sun Shang Xiang is, in her way, the spirit of Sun Jian, a woman who fights like a man, then your portrayal of Lu Ling Qi as the spirit of Lu Bu is appropriate, moreso because Lu Ling Qui is as brusque and mean (like her father) as Sun Shang Xiang is polite and refined (like her father). I have to admit that I wish she would not curse as much, since it seems to come out as every other word, but, then, if she did not, she would be out of character.

As much as I like the major characters in the story, the way you have handled the minor characters is deserving of mention. Your Cao Pi might be non-canon due to SSM4 / DW5, but you have still given him ― and, indeed, the rest of the Cao family ― a unique, well-defined personality. You have skillfully taken many of the lesser generals and made them into real characters, giving them all kinds of quirks appropriate to the style of the story. Every time I see a new name, I find myself curious as to what you are going to do with it, and that is the sign of a writer who can handle characters well.

Needless to say, I have greatly enjoyed your story, and I hope that you keep it going. It has already been rolling for a long time, and I do not see any end in sight, so ... do not stop, keep it going until it ends the way you want it to end. I look forward to seeing what becomes of Lu Ling Qi and the people that have come into her life.

One reminder that you might not need, but will be helpful to keeping your story posted: Do not forget to update your disclaimers! I would hate to see your work disappear without warning.
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From ANON - VampireDA3 on July 13, 2005
Woohoo, a new chapter!! ^_^; sorry, but this is my favorite out of your fics.
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From ANON - camerilla on June 21, 2005
Great!! You finally updated the story, I've been waiting this for ages....
As usual, the story is perfect.....I take it as Ling accepted the fact that she's in love with Dun, right??!!

Pls update asap.
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From ANON - HarborRat on March 13, 2005
I wanted to thank all of you who supported us in our efforts to have anime queen banned, it truly is a victory for us all. I can not express how awesome you all are. Thanks from the staff of Way of Musou.
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From on March 12, 2005
Hooray! That thief has be booted off at last!! I feel happy for you and your fellow DW author, TotallyNuts! I'm glad thats over.
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From ANON - Louize on March 10, 2005
Wow, I thought I'd reviewed this fic before, but, um... I guess not. Allow me to remedy that!

Your characterisation really brings the characters to life, and gives them all their own unique personality. After reading tons of fanfiction where all the characters sound basically the same, this is very refreshing. Your writing style is beautiful, and it's far above any other DW fiction on this site. Basically... Much love for you and this story! XD

Please, continue writing. And don't let the fic-stealing lowlife bother you - her reputation is as soiled as her deeds now, and nobody can possibly believe her over your friend. ^_^
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From on March 07, 2005
Ok, I just read your update and thought that it was pretty good, as always, hoping for a new ch soon. Also, on a less pleasant note...I have taken a look at your bottom A/N and then went to YueYing.net to check it out, frankly I felt insulted as an author to be sharing space with that kind of filth, I have left a comment on her story expressing my disapproval at such a despicable act. However, I refrained from sending email to her or the webmistress as no doubt their inboxs have been overloaded with different mail on this matter already. As I always come by to check for updates from you I will continue to watch what happens, I do hope this business will be resolved soon and the rightful author, "TotallyNuts" was it?, will be presented an apology from that low down thief.

Cheers,
Eva Unit-U (big fan of your fic, but everyone says that, lol)
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From ANON - kiki_0303 on March 07, 2005
what'll happen next?? Please update asap.........I'm eagerly to find out what'd be happened.
Regarding to the Crazy days in Wu incident, I'm very disappointed why someone can steal another person's fic to post it in here. You writters put a lot of efforts on these stories, I salute you guys talent, and finding this thief is absolutely a trash!!!!

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From ANON - dwfan on February 12, 2005
wow....so glad you're back finally some good dw update. This chap rocks...or you rocks!!! Anyways, update soon. C-ya!!!!
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From ANON - Anon on December 15, 2004
Writemorewritemorewritemore! @_@

One of the best fics on this site. Keep it up!
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