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Reviews for Hell's Bargain

By : longraggedmoan
  • From ANON - MaddiChan on September 09, 2012
    I get that this story was suppose to be 'dramatic' and have a bitter-sweet/sad ending, but it just seemed very forced, if not pointless. I'm referring to the fact that Link waited THAT LONG to actually attempt to aid Dark Link/stop Ganondorf from hurting him: yes, yes, I get that he was supposed to be 'frozen in shock and horror', but it all just seemed entirely too convenient to the plot, so we would be treated to unnecessary and cruel drama that leads to 'sad ending'.

    If anything, it just made Link come off as incredibly stupid for not attempting to at least STOP Ganon the moment he realized he was going to seriously hurt Dark Link. A complete damper to an otherwise well written story.
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  • From ANON - Kriiz on June 27, 2006
    Completely NOT what I was expecting!!!

    This short story was amazing! Your grammar and your language are both superb. The relationship you built between Link and Dark Link was truly amazing and I seriously -hated- Ganondorf during his torture. I was sitting here mentally screaming at Link to DO SOMETHING. The final scenes were absolutely heartwrenching but the ending really gives the reader closure. I am thrilled to have found this sweet, sad fiction; thank you for writing it!

    Two points of interest:

    1. "the place of ultimate pain." XD That phrase made me laugh.

    2. This isn't a critique but rather a thought. The concept of a Heaven may be common to many races of people and certainly probably to Hylians as well, but I found it interesting that you had Link carve a cross on Dark Link's grave marker. Being a Hylian, it stands to reason that he would carve a triforce into the marker instead, as the three Golden Goddesses are their deities. But I have nothing against inserting Christian ideas into fanfiction. It's actually a good reflection on the background of the author, I suppose.

    Fabulous work. I will definitely look in to more of your fiction. *FAN*
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  • From ANON - TGB on October 05, 2005
    You want to know something funny? Sometimes if a word sounds like it has a "z" in it, it does. Use spell check.
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  • From ANON - Aeris the Cetra on August 08, 2005
    Oh poor Link....Poor Dark Link....I'm still crying....I love it!
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  • From ANON - Takayu on August 04, 2005
    Ooooo very good!!! I like this kind of story.
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  • From ANON - Yu~ki The Vampire Prince on June 20, 2005
    SAd it so sad it not fair that the dark one had to die Cyurse you ganondorf! -grabs master word sand slashes- Die DIE DIE DIE sorry about that but i had tear coming from ym eyes and i blame that bastard. i like it ^.^
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  • From ANON - Carisa on February 02, 2005
    *sniff* soooo sad. . .poor Dark Link. . .
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  • From ANON - YaoiLuv on January 14, 2005
    Huh. The only thing missing was Dark Link gasping out, with his last breath, "Link...I'm...I'm...pregnant!"

    So much for hot enemy sex. I might as well have read a Harlequin.
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  • From ANON - Pinni on January 14, 2005
    Oh my Gods! That was such a sad story. I'm speechless. Poor Link! ::sob::
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  • From ANON - Riyoko on January 14, 2005
    T_________T That was soooooooooooooooooo sad....*sniff sniff* It made me cried so hard!!! I loved it!! It was beautiful.....I hope you write more stories like this one. Bravo!
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  • From ANON - Chibi on January 13, 2005
    Bravo...Amazing so sad...I almost cried...wonderful work...
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  • From coldone on January 13, 2005
    hey you know i usually don't go for this type of story but hey, it was a thrill!
    love how you made mr g. really sadistic... makes me want to write a battle scene.
    Hope you write another like this!
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