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By : ktatters
  • From ANON - donatien1740 on October 20, 2008
    WOW!! You really really wrote a great story!!! The end was so sad (although I did see it coming ^^)! Oh man!! This story is MGS worthy!! I think I'll read it again ^^

    Oh, and btw: google did a much better job on the german in chapter 27, one sentence was completely right!
    "Ich entschuldige mich, Arthur, aber die Welt muss verstehen" - "Es tut mir leid, A., aber die Welt muss erfahren" (I apologize, A., but the world needs to know)
    "Diese zwei sind in der Liga zusammen, A., Ocelot möchte MG zerstören. Es liegt auf der Hand." - "Die zwei stecken zusammen unter einer Decke, A., Ocelot will MG zerstören ..." (They are in this together, A., Ocelot wants to destroy MG. ...)
    So I hope I didn't bother you too much with my german. ^^

    Now I'll read your story again!
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  • From ANON - donatien1740 on October 18, 2008
    Wow! Ocelot - Big Boss - Arthur! This is getting sooo interesting!!

    You know, I'm german and reading this translations is so horrible! If you can chance it or want to let me help:
    "Sind Sie dort" correct would be: "Bist du da?" (Are you there?)
    "Ellen, Sie müssen den Bereich verlassen." - "Ellen, du musst von hier verschwinden." (You have to get out of here)
    "Es ist zu gefährlich, sie denken, dass ich ein Traitor bin." - "Es ist zu gefährlich, sie denken, dass ich ein Verräter bin." (It's too dangerous, they think I'm a traitor.)
    "Durchlauf" - "Flieh" (get away!)

    You don't have to chance, but if you want to, now you can ^^

    I can't wait to read the end of it!!!!
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  • From ANON - donatien1740 on October 10, 2008
    I know you posted this YEARS ago ^^ but I started last week searching for MGS fanfictions at adultffnet, so I hope you'll forgive me for the late review.

    I like your story! It's well written, the characters are great (I love how you write Big Boss!!) and your plot is fascinating and exciting!!

    I'll review again at the end!!
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  • From ANON - Kuuru-chan on December 14, 2005
    Shaa... I love your writing soo much! There really isn't enough Ocelot and Big Boss. Poor Arthur, though...

    -May the fics be with you.
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on December 14, 2005
    @_@
    ....
    ....
    I think I'm going to cry...
    But...Congratulations on finally finishing it!
    So Ocelot did kill Arthur in the end.
    Gaaah. I think I need to go read something completely absurd now.
    =^_^=
    Wonderful job!
    *applauds wildly*
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on December 07, 2005
    *twitch* With OCELOT?! *sighs* You're a sadist you know that?
    You know if it weren't a copyright infringment you could probably title this story "Things Fall Apart."
    *sigh* Poor Boss...Poor Arthur...You even have me pitying Ocelot for cripes sake!
    Of course saying that he missed the planes was not the smartest thing for Boss to do. Though Arthur wasn't being any better.
    Well, not wanting to take kids outr of school is valid, but Poor Hal! I know whats bugging him...*sniffle*
    JULIES A *$%#@!!!
    Still, a great two chapters!
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Kuuru-chan on November 30, 2005
    Can we possibly see some... graphic scenes between Big Boss and Ocelot?
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on November 16, 2005
    Wow....oh wow.....Geeze. Poor poor guys....
    Nice Game references.
    Keep it up!
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on November 09, 2005
    Well...Dang...maybe it WOULD be better if Arthur left.
    Leave Big Boss alone with Ocelot, since that gunslinging little *growl* cause he makes him so much happier.
    Oh...oh no! You're not making this one of the reasons he commits suicide are you?!
    Well If you are I demand to see an appropriate display of Grief from John.
    *kicks Ocelot* Butthead.
    *shakes fist* I will have Vengance on the Patriots!
    But as a side note, You did good making Big Boss scary for the interrogation.
    Can't wait until next wednsday!
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on November 02, 2005
    Wow....good job of making Ocelot human, even if I WOULD rather hate the bastard.
    Arthur is NOT sleeping around is he? That's just Ocelot being Paranoid right?
    As for Petrovich, hmmm...
    *stabs the la-li-lu-le-lo*
    At least no ones thought about kidnapping Arthur.
    Keep it up! You're almost to the finish line!
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on October 26, 2005
    *twitch*
    How DARE he?!
    With-with OCELOT?
    Does the man have NO taste? *Hugs arthur plushie and sighs*
    Okay maybe because of Julie he thinks he's got a right but...but...*cries*
    A VERY good chapter.
    Who the heck is the sabateur?
    Are Arthur and John EVER going to get over thier problems?
    Will you End the story happily?
    INQUIRING MINDS WANT TO KNOOOOWWW!
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on October 20, 2005
    Yay for updates!
    *pouts accusingly* You made it angsty again!
    Oh well.
    Can't really go anywhere else with a serious and faithful Metal Gear story.
    *sigh*
    I still wish i could kill Ocelot.
    I mean he was cute as a kid.
    All Righteous anger and patriotisim, but when he got old...gah. *shudder*
    Fantastic Job! *stabs Hal's stepmom*
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on September 28, 2005
    YAY! You kept your promise! *huggles* Yay! Happiness! and Hal! little Hal! Awwwww! *dances around* And Ocelot got set DOWN! W00T!
    ...I'd still like to seem him dead but the cockroach refuses to die. *growl* But YAY! John/Arthur forever!
    Good luck with the rewrites! Don't stress yourself out to much.
    =^_^=
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  • From ANON - Komikitty on September 20, 2005
    Whaaaat?! You PROMISED! Arthur and John! *sniffle* Poor John...Why are men so STUPID? Poor Arthur, Ocelot you BASTARD! How DARE he?! I'll rip his lungs out and make them into Bagpipes! I'll I'll.....I'll cry because now Arthur's in a bad way and John won't do anything cause he thinks Arthur isn't...*cries*
    ...You're sadist you know that?
    A talented writer, but a sadist all the same....
    Keep it up! =^_^=
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  • From Croik on September 20, 2005
    When I first saw this fic pop up, and saw the good comments for it, I was have to say I was interested. It wasn't until recently that I found the time to actually sit down with it, and I have to say, it was a great disappointment. The writing could use some polish, not necessarily grammatically, but...just in terms of common sense. Arthur just *walks* out of a military base when the soldiers' backs are turned? And as for character, though some of the original characters (the Shet bros) are genuinely interesting despite unfortunate name choice, the rest are OOC to the point of I'm wondering if you've even played the games. Big Boss and Ocelot are just so...shallow in this fic, fussing over medals and fighting through petty love triangles. Not to mention Ocelot doesn't miss--and even if he did, he certainly wouldn't pass it off with, "My aim must be off." His aim is his life.


    Arthur, to me, seems like a complete Stu--no, he's really more of Sue, actually. It's one thing to be good at what you do and catch the eye of a canon character, but he's good at EVERYTHING and even Ocelot, who betrayed and killed his own best friend, demands that he love him? And what's with the "being married is different than liking women"? This "You rape women for pleasure? Ew--no offense, of course, 'cause I wouldn't want to judge you for raping women" ? Slash fan or not I think your views on females need to be readjusted.


    Overall...I'm sorry I can't give you any constructive criticism, but I honestly don't think there's much you can do to help it, and you've already written so much so it's a little late for that anyway. But for you next fic, I suggest not using Wikipedia for your research, and...maybe playing the games a few more times.
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