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Reviews for No Good Deed...

By : WotanAnubis
  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 02, 2008
    Oooh...I love the ending. Wonderful, wonderful.
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 02, 2008
    Chapter 2 even better. Double the genitalia, double the fun!
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 02, 2008
    Awesome. Absolutely awesome. Yes, the femcock stuff is weird, but I can deal with it. The actual nature of the genitals doesn't really matter as much when it's all words, does it?
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  • From ANON - Sara Jaye, not logged in on January 19, 2007
    I have to second what Big Samurai said. I usually cringe whenever I see "dickgirl" in the summary, but instead of using the Pegasus Sisters' unique conditions as an excuse for more sex, you used it as an actual story point. Good job!
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  • From ANON - Big Samurai on January 23, 2006
    I have no idea why I was initially motivated to read this story. It has many things that I normally do not read. Hermaphrodites! Sister-on-sister incest! ... The funny thing is that you have taken all of those elements and produced a real story from them. I half-expected No Good Deed to be a lurid, tawdry sexfest, but, instead, you have delivered a peculiar romance that, in spite of its (many) oddities, comes out as not only readable, but intriguing.

    Why does it work? I think that the answer lies in your characterizations. In spite of their, ah, extra features, the three Pegasus Sisters are all more or less in character, from Florina being shy and sweet to Fiora being loyal to a fault. On top of that, you have taken Vaida – normally a rare sight in Rekka No Ken fanfic – and portrayed her wonderfully. As strange as her circumstances are, I can certainly see her thinking and acting as she does in the text. She is the best part of the story, particularly when she acts kindly against her own wishes.

    It helps that you put language to good use. I only found a few mistakes in the text, and most of them are little things like a missing word here and a repeated word there. The only goof that seemed odd to me was using you in the first chapter to refer to what Vaida was thinking. Since your story is otherwise done in the third person, that accidental instance of second-person narration throws it off a bit, but that can very easily be fixed by changing a few words.

    Maybe it is just me, but I can almost picture a sequel to this story for reasons that I cannot divulge for the sake of spoilers. Have you considered posting another piece along these lines?
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 09, 2005
    verry nice i like the dckgirls part you really should write a sequel
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  • From Streti on September 18, 2005
    Absolutely wonderful! Just the idea of the pegasus sisters as dickgirls is arousing, and you bring in the hook really well in the beginning with Florina. Vaida's personality is really brought alive by your talented writing, and the story moves fluidly. It was a bit of a shame that Florina and Lyn's scene was passed with just a mention, but from a storytelling prespective, it was a very successful technique. I am most delighted that intend to continue the story, even when it stands well on its on as a short story. Such a hot story, and with dickgirls to boot...
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  • From ANON - Serj on September 13, 2005
    Really excellent. If Fire Emblem owns your soul as you say, then perhaps you could use your talents to write some more great fics. We'll be waiting for you.
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