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Reviews for Child of Destiny Wesley Terro: Dark Awakening

By : starwildfox
  • From elegyenigma on December 01, 2006
    I've been meaning to write a review for this for some time but I keep getting sidetracked. But alright, man...I'm gonna tell ya straight and honest because I believe that's the best way to critique: Your story telling skills are really lacking. You need to build up on the plot some more, not just jump into it like you have. Not only that, but you need to give this a lot more depth...right now, this is like a kiddy-pool in the community center of adultfanfictions. The general way to improve this is to do what they teach you in high school English: brainstorm before you write. I myself do improv a lot, but before I start writing, I get a lot of ideas. You see? Also, find yourself an editor, as your story is in HORRIBLE need of capitalization corrections, punctuation corrections, spelling corrections, grammar corrections...overall, a serious level of proofreading. Nevertheless, despite the negative tone to my review here, I honestly believe that given time, patience, and a chance, anyone can improve. And let's face it, I wasn't exactly born with a keyboard in one hand and Microsoft Word CD in the other. :P
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  • From ANON - starwildfox on November 30, 2005
    If anyone has any ideas or thoughts of the story review how you want because if I'm told the bad things in the story as I make it I can make it better.
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