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Reviews for Attack of Mortha 'The love between Zelda and Link'

By : TBoneTony
  • From ArcticKitten on April 10, 2007
    Not bad, you have a good style in how you word things so it made the story flow nice, it was very enjoyable to read. Though Zelda was sharply out of character... and Just a few quirks: You dont need to stop the story to add a note to explain your logistics for certain things like zelda looking at herself in the mirror. By including that line Impa had told her it makes it clear that its an innocent thing, adding the note takes away from the story.

    And Zelda is very strong, determined, goal-oriented, and proper. Shes a little too... informal in this.

    And you got the wrong definition for zelda's "night terror". She had a type of flashback. A night terror occurs when you are asleep, and have a VERY violent nightmare that affects your real body- you thrash, scream, sweat. You can injure yourself. And when you wake up from them you have difficulty distinguishing that you are no long having the dream and the effects from it last a while. Its more common in children rare in adults. So the episode Zelda had was a flashback. (dont get me wrong that scene was well written! You jsut had the wrong word choice) And you dont need the [zelda's dream] transition, let the story flow into that scene. Explain that she fell asleep and have a story transition into her nightmare, "Zelda closed her eyes and drifted to sleep, her might caught deep in a dream..." something like that. It keeps things flowing smoother. And you rushed the sex scene quite a bit. I know you were trying to keep things more clean but detail doesnt mean smut.


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  • From ANON - Nathan on December 27, 2006
    goodStory amazing beauty inside of this story purely amazing
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 07, 2006
    I really, really hate the way you portray women. You make Zelda out to be a denfenseless, submissive little hussy whose only purpose is for sex. Hate to break it to you, but that's not Zelda. Furthermore, I'd like to metaphorically slap you in the face for characterizing women as nothing more than sex toys. You do this in all your fics---a heroine is sexually assualted by something as ridiculously preposterous as a snake or some slime, then she simply jumps into bed with the next human being she sees. Women are thinking, feeling human beings---or can your chauvanistic male principles not comprehend that?
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  • From ANON - Anonymos on January 20, 2006
    Cool! But you need to practise alittle more...
    Poor Zelda....Go Link! YEAH!
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