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Reviews for Golden Sun - The Insanity

By : Mikaa
  • From on September 11, 2010
    that was awsome. ^^ can't wait to read the other chapters. ^^
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  • From ThePairingGuy on December 04, 2008
    Wow. I would probably have found it disturbing that anyone would write such pointless violence if I weren't laughing at how bad the writing is. Numerous plot points contradict themselves or never make sense in the first place, there's no pacing whatsoever, and - you're telling me that Alex is meant to be _scary_ in this story? Alex just reminds me of a poorly designed cartoon character!

    And dude, comparing what you're doing here to Aeris and Nei is just ridiculous. Aeris and Nei's deaths were deep, meaningful events, and in Aeris's case were even intrinsic to the plot. You've killed off a half dozen characters just for the heck of it. There's no connection there. I think Rii put it best: stuff like violent infant murder and torture is just not fun for its own sake.

    As an attempt at horror and angst, this story makes a good comedy.
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  • From ANON - Rabid GS on December 02, 2006
    Great writing, but I hated the subject matter, being a rabidd GS fan. But I loved the writing.
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  • From Riii on January 25, 2006
    Are the usual people not reviewing? It's not so squicky that you need to sound so overly worried in your AN. I think people just prefer to r&r porn, you know? ^_^

    It is interesting to see Alex's crazy, selfish, ambitious side explored a little more here. (And very different to his portrayal in TAatO, which you seem to have left unfinished; why such a shift in characterisation? Did you just feel like a change?) The way the recent upheavals in Alex's life have left him unhinged and more obsessed than ever, with so much of his old self dead, does make some lines quite amusing. ("No, food not important..." ^^) He seems very Gollum-like, though - it's clearly intentional, what with "my precious" and everything - and in some ways, he seems more like Gollum than like Alex, which leaves the fic a bit weaker for it. I mean, Alex was a complicated character, and he's a bit of a babbling shell here, with only faint remnants of his elegance showing through, and little evidence of the sharp and secretive mind that went with his aloofness. (Sure, he figures out which floor to attack, but that's cake compared to masterminding an entire quest, and he seems fickle and bitchy to the point where he could get distracted from or arbitrarily change his mind about anything that his loopy brain would have had trouble processing properly in the first place.)

    You've established that he's lost the human side of himself, but you haven't really explored what that would mean emotionally for him and the characters that knew him. It's hinted at in that 'Oh, sure, he was willing to accept and show affection, but damned if he would help Alex.' paragraph, but then the next sentence makes it clear that this Alex is now a monster of fewer dimensions. Felix's feelings are indicated by his reaction, but it's a brief part of the fic, and it doesn't elaborate in a way that would indicate any more than the cliche. Sort of like how the reader's told that there _was_ shonen-ai between the two, but it's not explained. If Alex no longer cares, how/why he used to care isn't shown, he wants Mia as 'his woman'... The Alex/Felix thing seems a bit thrown in.

    The style of the title & Alex's warped mutterings is more humour than angst imo, and as I said, it's quite amusing in places. As for the horror... I hope this fic is going somewhere. With a strong plot, the torture etc would be - well, a part of the story. As I don't know the plot, I don't know that some of the squick isn't gratuitous. 'Cause infant death, cooking flesh - it's not tremendously gory here, but it's not exactly nice to read for its own sake either, obviously. And I can't think how you can go much further with the plot without some mention of Mia becoming necessary, or at least relevant. (I'd rather not make it up for myself all the way through. ^^; )
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