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Reviews for Concealed by Pain

By : Siarra
  • From RaveXTM on September 09, 2007
    Absolutely amazing! I don't really like the pairing, but this was great! Maybe I'll read more of this.
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  • From ANON - Jess on July 26, 2006
    Omg, awesome *drool* They're so cute together, if you ask me. I don't know a lot about french, but I found a tiny mistake in the translation.

    "Même sans la douleur, tu tiendrais mon amour...": "Even without the pain, you would hold my love..."

    "Mon chéri...": "My darling"

    The words for the first line were flipped around, and the second has the wrong meaning. "Darling" and "Beloved" are similiar, but, "My beloved" in french is...

    "Mon aimé"

    I hope that helped. Again, awesome story.
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  • From Rafaelle on June 12, 2006
    I'll have to agree that you don't need an excuse. It was good ^^ I'm sorry I don't do really 'constructive critism' but it's not like I do flames either!! I just can't judge english writing so good, but I know that it's good.

    As for the french part, I would just turn it differently because you can't use 'to hold' about love in french:
    "Mon amour serait le tien même sans la douleur..." [My love would be yours even without the pain.]

    That's all. ^^
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  • From aa45 on June 12, 2006
    Pretty good! Not too much dialogue, but great descriptions by the way. Look forward to reading more! I would have to say that this is probably one of the best fanfictions on this site that I've come across (despite that I'm new and all). Seriously...there's rarely any good ones on this site to begin with, which is kind of sad actually. The better writers are, the better their stories are. So, please keep it up! This site needs more writers like you. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 18, 2006
    Mood-wise this is one of your best stories. Much of it is created by describing Siegfried's physical (and emotional) injuries and how he waits for them, and also how they feel like to him. You can almost see wounds forming on your own skin. I don't know too much about the two men in question, but they have obviously worked as inspiration to you. The story starts with a bang, keeps you in its hold and the ending works as a descent into relief of sorts. I can imagine this being a part of a more extensive piece of fiction, so that the whole story doesn't really begin or finish where it does now; in essence, I believe there is more to these two than what it would seem at first glance.
    Looking forward to some more stories...
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  • From ANON - Lysse on April 19, 2006
    You don't need an excuse - the world always needs more Siegfried-in-bondage (a link to the original art might not be a bad idea either)

    Some of your word choices were a little rough in some places, but your french is letter-perfect - are you studying it formally? 'Douleur' is a really nice word choice as it refers to both physical agony and emotional trauma, instead of 'peine' or 'affliction' which are narrower.

    Either way, thanks for a nice read and some wonderful mental images. Rowr.
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  • From ANON - yamiskoi on April 14, 2006
    As soon as I read the themes, I knew it was about your favourite things. I also got a vague idea of what the fic was going to be like. And, as you wrote it, I knew it was going to be awesome. And let me just say, that, you never fail to disappoint.

    Although it’s almost a PWP, you’ve managed to make it so much more different than how other author’s write them. ^_^ You didn’t have them moaning at the end of every sentence. You didn’t have awkward pauses that interrupted the flow of the writing and reading. Everything was well worded, and left hardly anything to the imagination.

    I can’t see why anyone wouldn’t want to read this fic, but I promise you… My threats still stand. ^^

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