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Reviews for Unexpected Outcome.

By : Jaeden
  • From ANON - The PD on July 23, 2006
    Woohoo! New chapter Ahoy! That, is excelent. Just so I can be a good reviewer, things to change! Well, of course, longer (By way of forplay, possible backstories, w/e), and also yet again they are all horney nutters. This is awesome! However, to make this a proper story, possibly (Later) explain how the ray messed with her mind, how he/she went from being best friends with a guy to screwing him in one day, and of course Girl/girl... that's always a favourite! I curse this thing for not letting me format my stuff to read properly, soooo... ya.... Awesome addition!
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  • From ANON - The PD on July 21, 2006
    Come on now! Write something :) This entire section seems a little lazy however, so no blame to you! As I said before, tis a great story!
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  • From ANON - The PD on July 14, 2006
    Tee hee hee, I'm glad you actually check your reviews... unlike some authors i know. The 2->1 chapter thing flows great :) Glad i can help... now... off to try and register this username >.> As always, keep up the good writting!
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  • From AzureBonds on July 13, 2006
    That's great!:D A trasporter turing him into a girl. HAHA I love where this is going. Keep the chapters coming please.
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  • From ANON - The PD on July 12, 2006
    Well, this is so far quite good! Don't say how it isn't at the end of a chapter however, and possibly make them a bit longer, easily Chap 1 and 2 could just be a single one. Put them together based on story flow.

    Also, why did she.. he... wake up horny? Girls, for the most part, do not. Guys... ya.... Girls no. Also, unless the Teleporter messed with her mind, she probably wouldn't be this, oh i don't know, sex crazed? She/he really is :P
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  • From ANON - narmalee on July 12, 2006
    YAY!! more more more more!!! i hate cliffies!!

    please finish this... it has real potential and i like the element with the transporter... clevertouch =D if your ever on Crushridge or Garathos look up Narmalee!!
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  • From ANON - Shaithas on July 11, 2006
    nice start, you'll need a bit more before we can give some details reviews though :P
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  • From ANON - Ash and Sorrow on July 10, 2006
    Interesting beginning. Good to see more stories revolving around male NEs. Please continue I look forward to more.
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  • From AzureBonds on July 10, 2006
    It's a good start, I look forward to more chapters.
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