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Reviews for The Ten Orbs

By : WTF
  • From JohnMadden on June 18, 2008
    and the plot thinkens.
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  • From ANON - Krisa on January 14, 2007
    Nice keep writting please
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  • From ANON - Rose on December 31, 2006
    I hope you continue please. :)
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  • From ANON - Joey on December 30, 2006
    Dude first of all HOLY SHIT TAHT WAS AWSOME....... But you should make his dick bigger. Like put in some where that the orb made his dick grow.... anywhere above 7in. is acceptable. I only say dis b/c when I was 13 I had an 8in. boner, so it may be that some of the women who read this might not want to read if his dick is too small. Now don't get mad it's just an opinion...... but let that sit for awhile and please please please!!! write another chapter!! :0)
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  • From ANON - ANON on December 05, 2006
    That was fucking good titty fucking is one of the best i think more ASAP
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  • From ANON - Zedrik on November 09, 2006
    Well that was nice?
    Continue soon I whant too see where this is going...
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  • From ANON - Eternal Nightmare on October 29, 2006
    A very promising start, although some ooc from sora its fine. I'm surprised sora so willingly follows a strange voice...but then again he always was a bit gulible. Anyway looking forward to another, hopfully a bit longer chapter.
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  • From kamiyoni on October 19, 2006
    it's good to see that someone has't written another yaoi fic. it's not that yaoi is bad for kh (i just steer clear of it all together) it's just that theres maybe too much of it and we need stories like this to balance things out.
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  • From ANON - jemisard on October 16, 2006
    Spell check it.

    Grammar check it. "you are irritable to women" is almost certainly not what you meant in that sentence. If English isn't your first language, get a beta reader.

    Sora is OOC, at the very least because of the swearing and cursing.

    And why is a minor in a bar without being questioned?
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 15, 2006
    Holy shit.

    More. There needs to be more striaght stuff and less shitty yaoi here anyway.
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