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Reviews for Fire Emblem PoR: The aftermath

By : darkwave390
  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    Ah, must have missed that part. Lyre is a playable character in Radiant Dawn, but she and Lethe are actually twins. Sanaki's also playable, but she's still just a kid three years later (I think she was probably only 10 or so in PoR), and she uses magic, not swords.
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    Again, I'm liking the Lethe/Ike pairing. And nice job mentioning Lethe's sister.
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    This was obviously written before Radiant dawn came out, otherwise you'd know what happens to laguz that mate with beorc...and I'm pretty sure there's no jewel on Soren's forehead, only the Brand. It's closer to a tattoo, really.
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    Yeah, I like the Ike/Lethe pairing. And that was funny. "Thanks for pointing out I misspellings"...comical grammar, sounds like a non-native speaker. Silly.
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    Okay...really bad. As of chapter 2, we have...MISSPELLINGS ALL OVER THE PLACE!!! And consistent ones that make me think you actually don't know how to spell "beorc", "Greil", or "Geoffrey". (Haar was also misspelled, but only once, and I think it was spelled correctly in chapter 1.) But seriously...your constant use of "Beroic" for "beorc" absolutely infuriates me. (And, yes, it does not need to be capitalized.)
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  • From ANON - Cyberchao X on October 01, 2008
    Just read chapter 1 so far. This is good, a bit hilarious with the anachronisms. And, yeah, I don't believe the whole thing about 6" being the average. My reasons for believing that this number is wrong are based on my own body, which is remarkably BELOW average in everything else but above the so-called average "there". Yeah...I was curious so I measured one time after masturbating *blush*. It was about 7" fully erect, which considering my physique makes the muscles supporting it among the strongest in my body. So yeah...
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  • From BioYuGi on August 18, 2007
    Very nice, except it's Beorc, not Beroic. And I don't know if it was spelled incorrectly but it is Laguz. I enjoy the sensuality and the story behind it is well made. Keep up the good work.
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  • From BioYuGi on August 06, 2007
    Boyd is mentioned as being with Ike and back at the base. Other than that, good job.
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  • From MrMcBob on June 22, 2007
    This is really bad. You say you're married? You should be old enough to know how to spell, if not how to write. The characters are barely in character, and the whole thing seems very unnatural.
    3/10
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2007
    Nephenee somewhat ooc but still some solid writing.
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  • From Lym on May 31, 2007
    I think you should continue! Just so you know, people that don't have an account aren't able to review your story, which may be part of the reason why you got so little reviews before; I myself had to go through the hassle of registering just to review stories like these! You can turn off the option that blocks anonymous reviews in your profile though, so if you want more reviews, you should probably do that.

    Also, chapter 7, "Backup", has its formatting all messed up - can you fix it? I'd love to read another Ike/Lethe chapter (it's my favorite pairing in this fic), but I can barely make out what's going on there, unfortunately.

    Anyway, hope you continue soon, and just wanted to let you know that there's still fans of your story like me out there!
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  • From Pava on March 29, 2007
    I just read through the second half of the chapters, having looked at the ealier ones yesterday. I think there's been a strong improvement. The first few chapters just struck me as utterly random and odd. As an example, the whole Ike-Titania deal just came out of nowhere and never got any explanation. People have already talked about the beginning, though, so I won't grind on about it. Not much use with focusing on the past, since I think you've really upped your writing and - to a higher degree - believabilty. I really liked the scene with Boyd and Titania. There was tension there, and I'd like to see where you could take it. As a picky note, I'm pretty sure you've underestimated her age. 35 by the time of PoR would be fair going by the game script. That's still hot as far as I'm concerned. Geez, that was picky - it's up to you. Anyhow, watch out for repeating nouns. Examples would be the log that Boyd sits on, and those revenants that Oscar whips around.

    On lack of reviews: It sucks. I think most of us have experienced it at some point, which makes it strange that it still happens. I suppose this place is a bit too small to be self-sufficent.
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  • From on February 10, 2007
    Oh well, it don't matter and i see what you are saying.

    Great chapter by the way and Lethe's sister is exactly how i imagined her. I can't remember correctly so ignore my mistake but...did Marcia make up her mind about being Ike's second mate?

    update soon!
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  • From on January 28, 2007
    Pretty good and the rest of the review is said on my previous review.
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  • From on January 28, 2007
    Great chapter!

    I like the Lethe/Ike/Marcia one along with Boyd/Mist, the gangbang, and boyd and Titinia. For some reason it'd be cool if Ike got more mates, now that he has Lethe and Marcia. How about adding Titinia and Mai to his mates?
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