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Reviews for Memories Aside

By : Carola
  • From ANON - Suzanne on February 25, 2007
    I had another idea. another good story would be if Axel waited for a long set period of time but Roxas still doesn't come back so Demyx and Axel get together more often. then there are two endings i thought of for it. 1) Roxas comes back only to find Axel and Demyx really close or 2) Roxas doesn't come back at all. i think i like #1 better ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anne on February 24, 2007
    omg, i sooo want to see what would happen if Roxas were to come back! and an AU would be interesting too. but i'm really rooting for a continuation* of this story XDDDDD

    Anne


    (*sorry if its spelled wrong)
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  • From ANON - queenadreena on December 17, 2006
    The Axel/Demyx pairing is good stuff. Your descriptive words and sentences were lovely, but at times your spelling was a little off. Just the right length though, I hate seeing these tiny oneshots floating around, that have about one paragraph and no detail, so nice work. As for the AU, it depends what the plot would be. As long as you include a hot Axel/Demyx/Roxas sandwich, I'm not too fussy.
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  • From ANON - sennenricecooker on December 17, 2006
    SO HOT! OK... what does AU stand for? What ever it is, I'm cool with anything. As long as you update soon! ^__^
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  • From mikeleonvaletnine on December 16, 2006
    one: their ages have not been offically specifide.
    two: Fucking finnally some one put out Axels personality right for this sutuation, When i read it would be another comfort fic i got scared, i am so sick of people making Axel that broken whiny bitch that likes to pretend Demyx is Roxas and Demyx just taking it like that. It tares me apart. so THANK YOU for not doing that! you did a great job with ther personalitys i am glad some one studied them well enough to know
    three: try and pay attention to cothing, Axel seemed to have removed his jacket twice, an where are their pants and boots? did they ever take off their gloves?
    four: Words are a bit broken, and try to use more discripting words, espessally for names,(in exp. Axel, red head, Fire mage, Furry of flame, burning male, ext.) limit yourself to only yousing the same name once a paragraph inless ints a long paragraph, once twords the begingin and one more time twords the end. so it dosn't seem like your repeating yourself all the time. Try harder to get it in paragraph format and not a sentence every line.

    In other words it's great, a couple spelling errors that took me a moment to register. be sure to proof read your work a couple times and even have a friend proofread before you post. I can't wait to read more from you for sure and can't wait till you post more on DA. Maby you should join http://yaoi.y-gallery.net and the clubs there to post your fan fiction too.i own the Akudemy-club there as well.
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  • From ANON - rubyred on December 15, 2006
    AU is fine long as it's good...like everything in fanfic...i can be ok with about anything long as it's good.
    If your AU however is Saix is a female kitten taken in by Cloud but like he's under a spell!!
    and then the whole thing turns into a cuddle fest with a nutjob and the most woodedheaded hottie ever...i'd have to hit u...often AU just sucks the fun out things if it's a "real wrold" kinda AU for a Fasnty cannon.....
    but if u have a cool idea go for
    and this fic ovverall was very well done PWP rules....i liked it it made my happy in my yoai girl parts all is good in Yoailand where i rule!

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