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Reviews for ARAAT4: Origins

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  • From CrazyIvan on March 10, 2007
    X.X

    Oh now that is just plain mean!

    "Not counting that person who complained Mirage should not be able to get pregnant with Midnight."

    Come on now, that is just, sheesh, you wouldn't even mention me by name? You know, I've been with you from the first ARAAT and I never once had any beef with you, infact, I loved all of them. But the first time I bring up a scientific princible, you totally disown me. I feel so sad right now....

    Actualy, no I don't, I don't really care about that, infact, I'm glad you violated the laws of science, that makes the story so much more interesting. Also, I don't really care about what people think of me, that just isn't something that bothers me.

    Now then, this last chapter was another good one, and I can see it is nearing the end of the story. Now that makes me wonder, will the timeline be set right in this story, or are you planning on doing that in ARAAT5? Because personaly, I see alot of loose ends that could be tied up through another sequal, but that's just my opinion, I'm not Dennis Miller, so I can't be wrong. Anyways, I'll be looking forward to the exciting conclusion to ARAAT4, hoepfully it will live up to the expectations everyone has in you, because if it doesn't...

    Well, let's just say you might want to vacate the country for a few months while the vicsious mob settles down.

    For now, this is CrazyIvan, giving you the answer to the riddle I set forth long ago.

    The answer is, a plastic bag from toys'r'us, by entire armies and navies I meant those plastic soldiers, and by smaller than a child, well, bags usualy are smaller than a child.

    Semper phi, carry on...
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  • From ANON - N/A on March 05, 2007
    Well bloody hell... One wonders what Mirage will make of Knuckles after this. Assuming she remembers him, memory wipes occur. And assuming she actually makes it out of this.

    Although it comes to mind that, how do you explain Knuckles visions/memories of the Chaos incident? Midnight may have some, but last I checked kids don't get their parents memories. And isn't Knuckles meant to have super-strength? Last I checked, neither Mirage nor Midnight were amazingly srong. Mirage might have displayed acts of great strength before but... Not on Knuckles' level.

    Amazing chapter, but I don't think the idea was *that* well planned out.
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  • From ANON - CrazyIvan(InCognito) on March 03, 2007
    Wow, that was definately something magical. Well, not really but hey, what do I know?
    A hell of alot apparently, but that's not important right now.
    No, the important thing is, the story and how I shall leave this review. Most of the chapters have been good, great spelling, great format, great writing. That coninues to be the case, however, there are a few things I find a bit not up to par.

    Number one, Mirage pregnant from Midnight? Well, unfortunatly we have a very large problem here. The fact that she is mostly feline, and he is mostly echidnia gives you the fact that this is wrong. Besides them not being the same species, they're not even the same genus. Felines are mammals, echidinas are marsupials, although, a marsupial is a sub set of the mammal genus, so okay then. This leads to the fact that the seed would not take to the egg, one, and even if it did, there would have been something fucked up. Marsupial reproductive genes are different from standard mammals, that is why they lay eggs instead of giving birth live. The rest of the mammal genus is geneticaly structured for live birth.

    That's basicly the main idea I'm trying to give you here, and since that took up so much time, I'm going to let the other few things drop.

    So untill the next time we meet again, this is CrazyIvan signing off, semper phi, carry on...
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  • From CrazyIvan on February 25, 2007
    Coreman! Er, Medic! Lol, that was great, I was wondering when someone was going to do that, I myself have it used comedicaly, but I digress. Another good chapter, spelling format a-okay. WEll, nothing else to say but, semper phi carry on...
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  • From ANON - CrazyIvan on February 23, 2007
    Well, I finally got my net back on line, so I'm up again. Hurray. A chapter chalk full of sex to tide the auidiance over eh? Well, I suppose it will have to do.

    Also, on a side note, how did I remind you of cutting frozen bread?!
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  • From ANON - Anoman on February 10, 2007
    Sex is nice.
    Quite nice story.
    Sex nicer.
    Read next time.
    Hope it nice.
    Have nice time.

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  • From ANON - CrazyIvan(Notallthere) on February 10, 2007
    Well I have four minutes before I have to lose connection again. This is really a pain in the ass you know? No you don't but it doesn't matter, you've got motivation to get your story updated, ands you do that.
    Thius chapter was great, the likeness to the actual stage was fairly well done. Although, you forgot to put in those chaos monsters. Anyways, this chapter was great, not a whole lot of exlosions, no sex, but it's something we can deal with. Great spelling and format as per usual. Nothing more to say from me.

    This is CrazyIvan, reminding you to always cut away from yourself when using a blade.
    Semper phi, carry on...
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  • From ANON - Rand^^ on February 05, 2007
    I have to say I thought this chapter was the best yet. That is not exactly a hard thing to do. The fourth enstalment of ARAAT is not quite as fun to read as the first three storys. I am not flaming you so please don't take this personal but this story up till the last two capters has realy kind of lagged on and not gone anywhere. Anyway thanks for listening to me ramble, I'm sick with a fever and chills. It sucks balls.
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  • From ANON - Rand^^ on January 31, 2007
    Interesting but I dont think that is the way Shadow should be. I mean he comes out of his tube a badass. Come on thats not vere realistic. I mean in all the games when it flashes back to Shadow on the ark he is kind of un aware of his powers. You know think about it, Shadow wathes Maria die and there is nothing he can do. This Shadow being a badass from the get go kind of dosen't make any sense.
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  • From ANON - h3llboy on January 25, 2007
    omg... you are my heroes, please comment on my fanfic, i was inspired to write because of you, this is positively the best fanfic in existance. my fanfic : http://z8.invisionfree.com/sonic_spin/index.php?showforum=8
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  • From funkman on January 21, 2007
    "It is Windows 3000. How am I supposed to mess it up any worse than it already is?"

    XD. I couldn't help but point this out. Windows sucks, and I would know, my computer runs on it. I've had so many crashes, it's not even funny. If only I had more money...

    Anyway, so far so good. I'll be back on the next update... if I can that is.
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  • From eminem268 on January 20, 2007
    This fic is hard. Bring more in.
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  • From ANON - CrazyIvan(Notloggedinandlovinit) on January 20, 2007
    HUZZAA!!
    Finaly I can be lazy again!
    Oh well, nice chapter here, as always great format, good spelling, no detectable errors. The action and suspense are still as great as the day the first ARAAT came out, and I'm still looking forward to the series completion.

    For now this is CrazyIvan, ramblin on down the line.
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  • From ANON - Sonicmusicfan on January 19, 2007
    This is the best piece of work ever! It's me again, telling you that you have something here. It would be great to publish it in it's own book, but that would be going a little too far, dont'cha think? Anyway, good luck with the chapters in the near future.
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  • From Reko on January 18, 2007
    I just have to say this, you are one of my insperations.

    I recently began writing my own fanfiction, which I have submitted to several sites, this one included. I was amazed at the sheer briliant quality of your stories, and all of the plot twists and storylines and just... everything.

    When I review stories, I've always done my best to offer constructive critisism for everything I review, but as time went on, I've found it harder and harder to do that for people. But I will say this for you, despite how corny this sounds... No matter how good you are, you can always get better.

    "Only a mediocre writer is always at his best." W. Somerset Maugham

    Another reason I was inspired to write was due to all of the crappy work that people have posted, wether here or on Sonadow, or on Fanfiction.net, there's ALOT of bad fanfiction. I'm a writer, I've wrote several books, (They're... umm, not published yet...) and I was determined to show what I can do, I wanted people to see that I can stand all the mediocore pieces that flood Sonic The Hedgehog fandom.

    While I know my story is still far from reaching your level, I'm not going to give up, and while it may take a very, very long time, (I've been stuck on chapter 4 for a month, and I have like, 500 words done...) I'll get it done, I've got most of everything else planned out, I'm just hitting a roadblock on 4...

    Another thing I love about your work is your ability to make original charecters, to develop them as their own and to have people care about them, they care about what happens to them, and they want to know more about them, and what they do.

    My work has many of my own charecters, people I made up that, in truth, have nothing to do with Sonic The Hedgehog, but I applied them for that purpose. I want people to be able to connect with them, I want my audiance to care about what happens, I want to be able to display emotion in my work. I want people to "feel" the story, for people to feel what the charecters feel, and to understand why they do they things they do.

    But, I'm rambling, and I've said what I wanted to say, and I really should get out of your hair. I just wanted you to know that I admire your work, you're the kind of person who makes me want to work my ass off, and submit a chapter that will blow away (no pun intended) the readers.

    But, I have things I need to do, I have to train for ROTC, get strait A's, work on my Halo 2 machinema, write the scripts for said machinema, read my books, learn marching drills, and between all of this try to write my story...

    So, I'm a little swamped, heh heh.

    Anyway, thanks for reading through this piece of drabble, I'm sorry I couldn't offer anything useful for you, I just wanted you to know everything you've done for me.

    Thank you, and keep up the good work.

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