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Reviews for To Hell and Back.

By : 12344321
  • From ANON - raversunrise on August 28, 2007
    Oh my goodness! I hate to be one of the raving fans, but please update soon! You've got inherently good senses as a writer and you've left us at a very tense place! I mean...if you've played the game you know what happens at Sekigahara...but...I need to know what you've got up your wonderfully devious little sleeve!
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  • From ANON - Starry Dreamer on July 26, 2007
    Very sweet chapter. I like the personification of Mitsunari's children; they're adorable.

    Ugh, Sekigahara... I detest that stage with a passion. Probably because of what happens historically. :(
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  • From ANON - Starry Dreamer on July 23, 2007
    Thanks for taking my comments so well, hon. Another great chapter, and let me just say that the story's funny and cute enough as is; don't fret. :)
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  • From ANON - Starry Dreamer on July 20, 2007
    Hrm, this is an interesting one. I've just read this story in its entirety, and I have to say that your story certainly does have potential. It's balanced with a good sense of actual storyline, which is something quite a few stories on this site lack as is.

    One thing that irks me about your story, though, is the grammatical errors dotted throughout it. You did mention that you would more than likely have some in your first chapter. Do you use Microsoft Word? It has a decent enough grammar checker that it should pick up most of your mistakes (confusing "they're" and "there" for example). There's really no excuse for grammatical errors, as they're something that you should be able to pick up yourself. If you don't have access to Word and/or a decent grammar checker, maybe you should get a beta reader.

    Another thing is the author's footnotes throughout. Whilst not as annoying as adding your comments directly into the story, they still do interrupt the flow of what you're trying to say. This is more of a personal thing, as I'm sure there are people out there that wouldn't mind them, but I thought that I would bring it up anyway as I know there are also people out there that share my opinion.

    Please don't misconstrue this review as a flame; I genuinely did enjoy reading this story and I hope that my comments are seen as solely constructive ones. Please continue writing and posting your fanfiction so that we can see you grow and develop as a writer. Keep it up; you're doing well.
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