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Reviews for Teaching Love

By : nidhogg
  • From TBoneTony on January 12, 2008
    Even though I am not the one for dirty talk, I did highly enjoy this story.

    You did well in portraying Fina's innocence since she has been an isolated girl all her life.

    The way you had Vyse and Akia introduce Fina to sex was something really beautiful.

    I loved it


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  • From Gelgarin on August 23, 2007
    I'm sorry but I have to ask...

    Why does Vyse keep a dildo under his bed?
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  • From HondoOokami on August 16, 2007
    I’ll start by saying that I really liked this story! I found the threesome of Vyse, Fina and Aika to be a very enjoyable read and something I’ve wanted to see for a very long time!

    There was only a few things I thought could have been done to this to improve it. Those would be to use separate lines and spacing for speech, taking the story at a slightly slower pace (to me, some parts seemed to be a little rushed. Doesn’t matter too much, I still liked it!), and to try and keep the characters more in-character. I thought it was a little strange and out of place for Vyse to be calling Fina a ‘Silvite slut who loves pirate cock’ and for Aika to be calling her a ‘moon whore’, even if they are having a hot threeway.

    Either way things go, I really really liked this. Good work, and I hope to see another Skies of Arcadia Vyse/Fina/Aika lemon from you!

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  • From WotanAnubis on August 14, 2007
    I really wanted to like this story. And I kind of did. Vyse/Aika/Fina happy!sex is always fun.

    However, the repeated ALLCAPS exclamations with three exclamation marks kind of made me giggle. Just not my thing.

    A few technical things, though. Your story escapes the Huge Wall of Text problem, but it still consists of large blocks. That's not bad, but it could be broken up. Especially when it comes to dialogue. Whenever there's dialogue, even if it's just something like “Oh..oh!!oh..oh…OHHH!!!VYSE!!!YOU‘RE…BIGGGG!!!”, it should start on a new line. Because that's just the way dialogue works in fiction. All these characters talking one after the other without a single line break just look sloppy to my highly elitist eyes.

    Oh, and, if you must use three exclamation marks, make sure the last one isn't an accidental '1' as you did with “Oh moons yes!!1”. ;)
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  • From Streti on August 14, 2007
    Another note, when Fina is licking out Aika, she should still be dripping with cum from when Vyse came inside her earlier, which would mean Fina would lick Vyse's cum out from Aika's pussy... It should be mentioned if it went like this or if Aika somehow managed to clean herself inbetween the scenes.
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  • From Streti on August 14, 2007
    Some of the wording was a bit funny, like Vyse's "volume controlled" cry. I wasn't very interested in the anal sex scene, but the rest of the story was hot, including Aika's titfuck and Vyse's desire to "destroy Fina's innocence" and the scene where he revealed Fina's tits. However, did he remove her robe completely or just down to her waist to remove her upper body? I would like to think she was still wearing the robe when she was fucked, the top part falling down from her waist and the bottom part jumbled around her waist over her butt, and when Vyse came over her behind and butt, he spurted his cum over Fina's naked back and the robe jumbled at her waist. Some details like that about the final cumshot on Fina would have been nice. But the story was hot!
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