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Reviews for Submissive Behavior

By : WishYouNew
  • From ANON - Batman on November 24, 2012
    No! Noooo! You need to update this! Please! I think double penetration would be super hot but if you're not comfortable with that maybe Vergil because he bit Nero first? I don't know! But I really REALLY hope you finish this! It's so hottttt~
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  • From IvoryTears on June 17, 2011
    Wow, this is really hot stuff. I say Dante goes first, cause you got to save the best for last. ;)

    I hope you update soon!
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  • From on June 23, 2009
    If you continued this soon, i would worship the dog poo you happen to step in!! drool-worthy, really!
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  • From Ashray on April 16, 2009
    Both at once ^___^
    Everthing else wouldnt be fair ! (Poor Nero)^__^
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  • From LudellaSD on January 02, 2009
    I really do like this fic! Btw Neros a big boy he can take them both at the same time! lol
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  • From Python on December 31, 2008
    omg...that was awsome!! you gotta add the next chapter!! i love this. keep it up!
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  • From Lilianna on December 29, 2008
    Nice one! Nero in heat is a smexy thing. I've noticed it's been quite a time since you wrote it.It's not that I'm complaining ,but I was wondering maybe you're a little bit discouraged to continue because of previous comments? NO OFFENSE TO OTHER REVIEWERS! That's just a thought. You know, whenever I get a discouraging review I feel a little bit down, but it happens. Update the story no matter what.And once again to all people who reviewed- don't get it wrong:)
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  • From royceclaytonlives on December 23, 2008
    This is hott! I love the whole idea! Poor Nero. I think Vergil should get him first but honestly any of the options is SMEX-TASTIC!
    Keep up the good work!
    With Hearts,
    Crys
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  • From Hennajin on December 11, 2008
    Wow is all I can say. Great story, and well written. ^^
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  • From wispwolf on December 04, 2008
    Much better! Umm *Pokes You* You are going to update soon right?? *puppy eyes*
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  • From wispwolf on September 29, 2008
    Loved it!! Can't wait for the next update, but you really need to find a Beta to check your work (finding your own mistakes can be really hard sometimes). Great work and look forward to more:)
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  • From IsaacSapphire on September 24, 2008
    Man, that’s fantastic. You need some copy editing help, but the writing itself is very good. I love how you’ve got Nero still in character even when he’s horny out of his mind. Too many authors don’t handle that well.

    Aside from some little spellcheck accidents (easily fixed by just going slower using it), your two biggest problems are as follows;

    Capitalization 101: first letter of the first word in a sentence is capitalized. Proper nouns (names of specific people, places, things, and ideas) are also capitalized. Otherwise, don't capitalize it.

    Your = thing belonging to you. You’re = you are.

    Well, Vergil has both eldest-right and first claimer’s right. Also, I don’t think Dante would have asked if he wasn’t willing to be second. On the other hand, Nero’s made it clear that as hormonally crazed as he is at the moment, he’s not out of the game altogether. And it occurs to me that Nero might prefer Dante, for familiarity if nothing else.

    I was going to offer to Betta, but it looks like everyone and their monkey is offering already. I'll offer anyway though, just because I'd love first dibs on reading it :)
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  • From CrimsonAlchemist on September 23, 2008
    It was good BUT there were some spelling mistakes like instead of saying "funny" it was fully? so ya but other then a few silly spelling mistakes it was hot! Both at the same time sounds hot BTW Nero can handle it hes a big boy. xD
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  • From Apples4Ryuk on September 23, 2008
    Wow, I'm intrigued! I can't wait until the next chapter. I think perhaps further explanation of how Vergil is in the dream, or something like that, would make it more interesting (later on, of course). Also, if you'd like, I could be a beta...? Haha, I've never done it before, but I could fix the mistakes in here.
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