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Reviews for Cammen's Lament

By : takeshi37
  • From bloodravyn on May 02, 2011
    loved!
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  • From vision192 on October 28, 2010
    I realize this is quite old now, but I loved this story. It was a bit out there at times, but in a way that I believe complemented the story. Great writing overall, please consider writing more.

    Your penname is awesome, by the way. ;)
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  • From LyricalSlytherin on December 10, 2009
    Well, that was enjoyable. Vivid and intense, with a dark edge to it, courtesy of Morgan's rather... distinctive attitude, which I think you, well, nailed. *rimshot* As for the general writing, I do have to say, I like your style. Enough description to set the scene without delving into purple prose.

    Taking a peek at the reviews, I'll chime in:
    The threesome with Isabella and Zevran? Yes.
    A focus on Aedan's relationship with Morrigan and Leliana as well as the rest of his camp followers? Hells yes. And I'd especially love to see your rendition of Leliana.
    His seduction of the Queen? Sure, but not high on the priority list.
    His domination of a desire demon? Geeze, now there's an image. If you could pull it off believably, given how the demons are presented, sure.

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  • From greywarden on November 28, 2009
    If you're going to have him go at it with his mother, you should totally have him get it on with Wynne too. I'd laugh, and it'd work for this kind of story. When she brings up your relationship with Morrigan you have the option to tell her "There's a lot of more of me below the waist", and end it with "Well, it's true.".

    Outside of that, there's Bella and Kaitlyn in Redcliffee too, if you're planning on making this more than just a one-shot.
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  • From takeshi37 on November 21, 2009
    I greatly appreciate the reviews. Considering the time and effort I put into this, the lack of response would be rather disapointing. Will I write more? It won't be for a month and more reviews would make it come quicker. Vesvius, I'm very happy to hear that you absolutely loved it. Are there any specific parts you especially enjoyed? Also, what are people interested in seeing more? Aedan's seduction of Arl Eamon's wife? The threesome with Isabella and Zevran? A focus on Aedan's relationship with Morrigan and Leliana as well as the rest of his camp followers? His seduction of the Queen? His domination of a desire demon? A story about his sexual dalliances with the denziens of Hyever including his brother's wife? I have ideas for all of these.

    Please let me know. Thanks.
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  • From WotanAnubis on November 17, 2009
    Hmm. What to say about this fic? Het isn't really my thing, nor is the... overall tone of this fic. It's clear this fic just isn't for me.

    That said, it was competently written and you got the voices very much right. Even though I do doubt Morrigan would be so... understanding... about Cousland having casual sex with others, she did sound like herself, so good job there.

    Also, the sudden appearance of 'fat jugs' so early on in the story... Clever juxtaposition with the otherwise very Dragon Age-y writing style or just jarring? I can't really decide. It harkens back to the tone, which, like I said, doesn't do it for me (and which I don't really understand either).

    Nevertheless... My problems with this fic are largely my own, so I'll just say 'well done' and leave it at that.

    Keep up the good work.
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