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Reviews for Stolen Trigger

By : SolStrike
  • From salarta on January 09, 2011
    Pretty good start, especially for a beginner. There are some grammar, spelling and sentence/paragraph structure errors in spots, but those can be easily corrected if you run it through a spellcheck and review at least the structure before posting a fic. It might be a little painful to do that at first if you're just starting out, at least if you're like how I was when I started writing, but it's really worth it.

    Also, I'm not sure how others feel, but personally I don't like when a fic has tons of codes that are only codes planned for the future and not content the fic currently has. It's essentially false advertising and makes people less likely to believe you have the content you're claiming to have in your fics. Plus I'm doubtful you'll be able to do all of that; better to add as you progress.

    As for the content of this story itself, as I said, pretty good start. I'm sure some people could be pissy about having Crono speak when he was a mute protagonist, but I'm okay with a little leeway. I also think that the fairground setting provides tons of great possibilities that are quirky and unique, which is something I think more readers are starting to want from adult fanfics. Only so many times you can write or read barebones orgies and regular sex, after all. :)
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