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Reviews for Random Fire Emblem sexfics

By : DrKrieger
  • From WotanAnubis on March 14, 2011
    You need to do quite a bit more formatting. To put it simply, you need to use the Enter key way more often.

    Dialogue should always start on a new line. It just makes the whole thing look cleaner.

    As it is, these six blocks of text just look cluttered and confusing, making the whole thing more difficult to read than it should be.

    Other than that, you are technically competent and your work looks promising (apart from the formatting issue), provided you keep practising. You might want to consider putting a bit more detail into your sex scenes to flesh them out some more.
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