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Reviews for What You Don't Know

By : SanitysStorm
  • From NaekaneSato on April 04, 2012
    Aahh, Sheena's starting to get it. She's angry as heck about Zelos's behavior regardless, but she is starting to get it, it seems. I really liked that little bit at the end, too. Will she perhaps be discussing this once they meet Verius? Or will something else occur?

    I would just be repeating myself about your excellent depiction of the characters, (even Lloyd's this time), your incredible writing style, your descriptions, dialogue and sultry sex scenes. As always, keep up the great work.
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  • From NaekaneSato on January 09, 2012
    Wow, now I must commend your characterization of Sheena. At least one of your earlier chapters was told through her perspective, but it's really strong in this one. I really like how this chapter came out, with Zelos consoling Sheena even as he continues his act of being a playboy (which seems to be slipping more and more, at least if I'm reading it right). I kind of wonder if Sheena's thoughts of him as being a lifeless doll like Colette was is a bit of foreshadowing to his betayal/double agent act (or death if it's going that route). Or maybe I'm just reading into it too much

    By the way, I found the line "more of a love...uh...fuck tri-something-gon...ah, screw geometry." to be hilarious. X3

    There are a small number of typos, not terribly major, but still there. Also, Corrine is referred to apparently a "he. I know, he sounds like a girl in the orginal game, and he even sounds like a flippn' woman as Verius in Dawn of the New World, but in both game as a both forms, he's apparently he. Go figure.

    So anyway, keep up the great work. I don't mind if it's late. I completely understand why you can't get these chapters out sooner. I'm just glad they're as good as they are!
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  • From NaekaneSato on October 17, 2011
    Wow, just wow.

    You really have Zelos' character down. I know I mentioned this before, but you really capture his personality and thoughts so well. I really liked this chapter. I seriously can't see or think of anything wrong with it, including grammar or spelling erros. I thought teh comparison between how Zelos looks at Sheena when he can let his guard down and how Lloyd looks at emotionless Colette was an esepcially nice touch. Well done!
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  • From NaekaneSato on September 06, 2011
    Now this is really good! Zelos's thoughts and dialogue are written near perfectly. This senario, with Zelos and Sheena getting it on without a real relationship, but Zelos secretly in love with the ninja is not just well-depicted and written, and quite plausible. The sex scenes are good, just sensual and detailed enough without being overly graphic. I can't wait to read more!
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