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Reviews for Across the Garden, Through the Window

By : Amaronith
  • From sillyneko345 on July 16, 2012
    Yay, I'm so glad you decided to post this! The R&B universe has many facets and you covered this one wonderfully. Sometimes you just need some smut, you know? (Even if it is HETEROSEXUAL fic in my Jak yaoi. Lol)

    In all seriousness, I love how comfortable the two are with each other, like only best friends or siblings can be. Keira trusts Jak implicitly. And since they basically know what the other is thinking before it's even said, their first sexual romp isn't completely awkward and horrible. Be glad for that, you two!

    Thanks again for writing this for me! We need to get back to RTM soon >.>
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  • From ANON - Reva on July 16, 2012
    Since I read every single fix robin writes and this is a kind of spin-off of Room n Board, I thought I'd read it too. I try to criticise a few aspects, I hope it won't sound too harsh or strange, since english isn't my native language.

    The text itself is written nicely and easy to read, no grammar errors or strange sentence combinations. What bothered me was the speed of the storyline - you could have taken more time for the story to happen, maybe instead of one chapter, two. I thought it was strange that Keira sees a penis for the first time and is all over it - not many girls are that pen minded when they're that age ;) And that Jak exactly knew how to handle her without any instruction from her was strange as well - here you could have put in a little part, where she explaned it to him, where to touch etc and that would have made the whole experience more believable.

    But it's nice of you to write this part from Robin's story =D And despite the few things, I enjoyed reading it!
    Are you planning more chapters or is this supposed to be a one-chap-story?
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