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Reviews for Nights of no return

By : Gold4sun
  • From ThePairingGuy on March 13, 2017

    Hmm, this fic is kind of a mess of disconnected ideas.  You go to great lengths to introduce and elaborate on Isaac and Mia's long term relationship, but then the characters go on behaving just exactly as they would if this relationship had never existed.  Mia getting into bestiality has nothing to do with Isaac and Jenna having recreational sex in Tolbi, and neither one has anything to do with a true love relationship between Isaac and Mia, so I don't understand why you didn't do this as three separate fics.  Having them together actually hurts all three stories; for example, Isaac jumping into bed with Jenna so easily while Mia is at home pining after him makes Isaac really unsympathetic.

    As far as the actual sex scenes, Isaac/Jenna is the only one that really works.  It has the characteristic zestiness of two exes finding themselves going at it again, and realistic touches like the old couch just make it feel hotter.

    As for the others... Sex while sleeping is a perfectly fine kink, but you need something to make it plausible, like a sleep enchantment.  A guy simply not waking up while a woman is jumping on his crotch and screaming just isn't believable.  There's also no way Mia could have effectively cleaned up her lost virginity.  To get blood out you need some water and scrubbing at least.  Also, I'm a fan of Isaac/Mia so it's a tease that we have no sex scenes between them with both awake.  The bestial scene has an okay setup, but it comes off more like two humans having doggy-style sex than actual bestiality. To me human sex is much hotter than bestiality, but if you're gonna have a human do it with an animal then at least make it a bit wild.


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