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August 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, come on. Separate the paragraphs, do a little proofreading, and this fic would be way better. It wouldn't hurt if you'd add some decent detail and some kind of emotional connection, either - I mean, we don't even get the obligatory "he burned with lust for her body" spiel. That's just sad.
Seriously, I like the pairing, and I applaud anyone who wants to write it, but put some real _effort_ into it!
Seriously, I like the pairing, and I applaud anyone who wants to write it, but put some real _effort_ into it!
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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
How about...separating paragraphs? Detail maybe? Grammar? Good idea, bad writing....
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September 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good, I love Ryu/Katts. Spacing between paragraphs would have helped immensely, as well as spelling and grammar check—even manually is better than nothing. But overall, it's a little more than decent.
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August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Proofread this. Seriously. And for the love of all that's good, learn to seperate paragraphs! It's all one big unreadable block of text!
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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love the Katt/Ryu paring. You are so awsome for writing this. Good stuff!