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January 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi.
I realise I'm as guilty of not doing this as anyone, but this story could really, really, use a speller checker. Hotmail includes one for free. Also, if this is the sort of thing you like to write about, I'd suggest using a lot more detail and description. Try and explain the character's motives, such as 'Why is Jill suddenly hungry for Zombie Cock?' Where did Chris come from? Why didn't the pizza boy have pizza? A certain amount of mystery is good in a story, but I for one like to see some of the great questions answered.
I realise I'm as guilty of not doing this as anyone, but this story could really, really, use a speller checker. Hotmail includes one for free. Also, if this is the sort of thing you like to write about, I'd suggest using a lot more detail and description. Try and explain the character's motives, such as 'Why is Jill suddenly hungry for Zombie Cock?' Where did Chris come from? Why didn't the pizza boy have pizza? A certain amount of mystery is good in a story, but I for one like to see some of the great questions answered.