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July 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The story was ok but the sex scene could have been longer and more discriptive and you made some grammer errors.
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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was great, Ada playing "slave and master" with Leon that was the best!
*drools all over her computer*
God I wish I was in Ada's place!
*drools all over her computer*
God I wish I was in Ada's place!
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liked that. It was pretty well written and the theme was a nice twist.
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November 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the Ada and Leon pairing, however, this isn't the best written one. It is still good for a PWP.
I hope you write more Ada and Leon in the future.
I hope you write more Ada and Leon in the future.
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
my dear your story is in need of a good beta. Dont take it too hard but your entire text is too grouped together and it is hard to read. All the speakers are speaking all in confusion as I saw one large body of text. you need help with your formatting too.
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. It got pretty hot. The story could do with some formatting, it gets hard to figure out what's going on at the end.