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September 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Omg I loooove! Will there be more? I hope there will be more...hehe. *sweatdrop*
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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG This is amazing ! I really like where this story is headed <3 Anyway, YAY french xD I like it when people incorporate french in their fanfiction… mainly because it’s my native tongue xD
There were a few minor errors in the French, and I thought I’d point them out, even though they’re not exactly important:
3.) En fait, ceci est venu pour vous hier. - Actually, this came for you yesterday. <- instead of « vous » You should use « tu » because it’s Sora’s mom talking to her son.. unless her son has a higher status than his mom x3
4.) Il est de votre école. - It’s from your school. <- instead of « votre », change it to « ton » for the same reason as above
6.) Ah, congradulations, mon chéri ! - Oh, congradulations, my darling! <- “congradulations” isn’t a word in French =P It’s actually “félicitations”
Anyway, apart from those little things (that most people wouldn’t notice xD), I’d just like to say PLEASE post sooner because you’re my god right now.
There were a few minor errors in the French, and I thought I’d point them out, even though they’re not exactly important:
3.) En fait, ceci est venu pour vous hier. - Actually, this came for you yesterday. <- instead of « vous » You should use « tu » because it’s Sora’s mom talking to her son.. unless her son has a higher status than his mom x3
4.) Il est de votre école. - It’s from your school. <- instead of « votre », change it to « ton » for the same reason as above
6.) Ah, congradulations, mon chéri ! - Oh, congradulations, my darling! <- “congradulations” isn’t a word in French =P It’s actually “félicitations”
Anyway, apart from those little things (that most people wouldn’t notice xD), I’d just like to say PLEASE post sooner because you’re my god right now.