rate_review Reviews

LOVE IT

As Aloneintheopen said, more discription would be good, plus, water isn't a very good lube lol. And, the spacing was good, but could've been better if an extra return would have been made. Sora probably would've been a bit more surprised and/or nervous when Riku came onto him, too. Other than that, it was really good! I don't usually review 'cause I'm lazy, but I really liked this one, and it was hard to believe there aren't that many reviews! P.S. Don't listen to that MeanMo freak, 'cause they just suck! (in a bad way)

Did you rip this off from a Japanese doujinshi? Because it was certainly rushed and poorly thought-out like one.

that was great! do more yaoi and lemons

You have great potential. I suggest thinking about lengthening the scene because usually the more description you have, the better it is.