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November 13, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This was very hot. You should write more. With breeding.
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November 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Bloody Roar! Holy fuck, I used to have this on the Playstation last century. Think I played it on Xbox once too... Hadn't realised there was a story section here :)
Negative thing I noticed, a little spell-check would help - if you don't have one, find one online for free! They don't catch everything – as my own stories sadly attest - but things like 'rabbbit' can be a little off-putting. I get that this is a rough first attempt deal, so I’m just mentioning it to underscore the value. Correctly spelled sex is coherent sex :)
Positive thing – I like a good noncon scene and, while a little rough around the edges, this was pretty hot. The coyote fella’s control as he broke Alice down physically and verbally seemed well paced to me. There were a few bits that some might describe as ever the top – the size of the coyote’s weapon, the massive load of sperm – but I and quite a few others like that sort of stuff, so if you like writing it, it’s fine!
Pissing into her to mark her was a good touch too.
Negative thing I noticed, a little spell-check would help - if you don't have one, find one online for free! They don't catch everything – as my own stories sadly attest - but things like 'rabbbit' can be a little off-putting. I get that this is a rough first attempt deal, so I’m just mentioning it to underscore the value. Correctly spelled sex is coherent sex :)
Positive thing – I like a good noncon scene and, while a little rough around the edges, this was pretty hot. The coyote fella’s control as he broke Alice down physically and verbally seemed well paced to me. There were a few bits that some might describe as ever the top – the size of the coyote’s weapon, the massive load of sperm – but I and quite a few others like that sort of stuff, so if you like writing it, it’s fine!
Pissing into her to mark her was a good touch too.