rate_review Reviews

I loved this fic. It caught my attention immediately, and was deffenately an excellent read. You absolutely HAVE to continue this one. I would love to see what Link and Gannondorf's reactions would betheythey found out... And if Ruto would have the same reaction, or see past the titles each family member has....

I am counting on you adding to this one.

oh my god....*lil squeal* it's soooo good! but it's soooo sad at the end of the chapter...;.; I hope you write more, this is truely a lovely piece.

that whas great pleas continue

You certainly do write well. A nice, original setting and an intriguing story. I'm never too fond of non-consensual scenes, but the situation developed rather surprisingly into a consensual one. If you do revise the story, I would hope that you'd downplay the non-consensual element. Trevan's change from an uncaring assaulter into a joking, tender and uncertain first-timer is too striking. I do hope you write more, as this is much better than an average lemon, and the setting is intriguing enough with a solid foundation to warrant further exploration.

Yoritiriting is good, but there were some things that struck out:
"Why is Ganondorf not aloud in here freely" - erroneous spell checker correction of allowed?

"Killing me would me more trouble than it's worth, hmmmm?" - typo of be into me?

"It will only incense my eagle parent, and I am
well aware of how vital my praenomen hidden from our enemies." - a rather strange sentence. Words missing?

Thanks for writing this, I hope you continue!

I like it. Write more. =)

I LOVED this fanfic!

I held my breath as I scrolled lower towards the end.

Really, You totally should continue!
Like maybe their dad's find out or something!

JohnSlayer

I liked it, but I really didn't get it is. what are their profiles?

What happend to Link is he dead?

I want more, more I say mwahahahahahahahaha *cough cough* I'll work on that. Anyway, that was really good. It would be great if you carried it on.