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Reviews for Ninja Gaiden Koibito

By : Tycho

From ANON - Small Ninja on May 19, 2007
A great mix of wild sex and passion in the 24th chapter!!!

PERFECT!!!
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From ANON - z on May 13, 2007
Excellent ch.25. I like how you established that this is not merely a coming of age journey for Elliot but also a form of validation that he's also a man worthy of recognition just like Hayabusa. I'm anxious to see where you'll take this next.
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From ANON - No Brainer on May 09, 2007
Wow i got the chapter right, well kinda!!! Anyway great intense scene as always, as i see it in DOA TN also hints Tina and Lisa as lesbians.

How the story unfolds is great also
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From ANON - zero on May 08, 2007
Ch 24 was excellent! Perfect way for Christie and Elliot's meeting and yet another well-scripted set-up for the ensuing carnal act (Thank you for finally including Elliot x Christie in your epic fic!). I enjoyed how you incorporated scenes from the game and that one Rumble Roses reference in the plot. Bravo.

So is it going to be Elliot's story from now on or are you planning to have some "instant action" scenes with Ryu interspersed or bring him back after completing Elliot's narration of events?
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From ANON - Freakson on May 08, 2007
So, you are obviously going with an Eliot/Christie scene for the next chapter. When they do it, please add many positions. Give Eliot a chance on top, too. Maybe have Christie on her hands and knees, getting drilled by Eliot from behind, with Christie being surprised at how wild Eliot can be.
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From Simmerl on May 07, 2007
Finally, an end to the lack of quality lesbian scenes in the DOA section. Thanks. ^^

And btw - I really lol'd at your Rumble Roses joke.
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From ANON - No Brainer on April 30, 2007
Now all this story needs a nice epiloge to be the greatest fanfic ever

How about a sex scene with many toys betwen Tina and Lisa. With every new game released team ninja is trying to show us how much of a "friends" they are! Show them how its done Tycho!

Hitomi and Elliot can arrive to visit them on their way to Hayabusa and play peeping Tom on them. In the end the whole gang goes at the ninjas for a grand finale!!
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From ANON - zero on April 11, 2007
That last chapter with Elliot's foursome was masterfully written. Excellent vocabulary and scene description as always. Any chance that we'll be seeing Hayabusa again? Maybe Tina paying a visit to their Ninja household and carrying Kasumi's share of conjugal responsibilities along with Ayane.
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From omega13 on April 07, 2007
Excellent as always. Keep up the good work.

Who exactly is returning? Couldn't be Ryu considering Elliot never encountered him?

Perhaps the owner of the island, Zack? Or perhaps you have taken one of my ideas to heart, not to be arrogant or anything.

Regardless, I'm sure it will be wonderful. Can't wait.
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From omega13 on March 26, 2007
I have been following this wonderful story since you first publised it, around one week after I managed to beat Ninja Gaiden. Oriignally I believed that this would become something that would be rushed through, but you have obviously devoted a considerable amount of imagination towards every chapter.

Everything seems to have been constructed with absolute perfection, actually managing to reveal to the reader that the main character isn't some deviant that sleeps around with every woman he comes across. Everything either seems motioned towards his journey of vengeance or eventually the simple realization that the female characters actually desire him. Tina quizzing him on his feelings also strikes the nail perfectly...before the two weeks of sexual escapades commences.

You have managed to keep the balance of your story very well. It litterally just keeps getting better as you have managed to allowed every female character their due whilst creating situations that refectly reflect them. As one writer to another you have both my admiration and my envy.

Perhaps my only concern is that our favorite building jumping, warhammer-swinging, breast battling bombshell (Rachel) hasen't managed to get her fair share. This is just a request and nothing more. Rachel probably wouldn't be able to contact Ryu considering his newfound loyalties to the mother of his child(Seriously dude, sweet stuff ^_^). Elliot obviously isn't the same...level as the super-ninja, Rachel should get a substitute out of circumstance. She deserves it!

Perhaps, having attained control of the clan, perhaps another super ninja (Hayate) could journey to the island seeking Ryu and Kasumi. Attempting to rescue his relationships with his sisters and dearest friend, not to mention the alligence between their respective clans. His arrival is greeted with the knowledge that they have already departed. Maybe have either Hayate or Rachel realize who the other is. Ryu could have talked normally to Rachel and Hayate has his ninja network that would have known about Ryu's assault on Vigoor and those that assisted him. Once again, just a suggestion, nothing more.

I'm guessing that with Hitomi's guidance, Elliot will manage to become less timid. Of course, if Tina or Christie began leading me off to some secluded bedrooom, I'd probably find myself questioning my health insurance. Heh heh. If you're planning to dedicate a series to him, perhaps you could have Kokoro or Leifang enter the picture.

You've actually inspired me towards another project of mine revolving around The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Princess. Throughout his journey the legendary hero finds himself confronted with several members of the female cast, although I would never betray his character...yeah, shameless plug and request for a review. Heh heh.

I've read your God of War story alongside your Superman one. Are you planning to do anything for the (most excellent) sequel or would Kratos' latest vengeance truly occupy that much of his time?

My e-mail is in my profile if you feel like responding, of course, I understand time restrictions. Thanks in advance.
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From St. Tabris on March 20, 2007
"Forty-SEX." HA! HAHA! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! Oh that's a good one! That's funny...
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From ANON - Scalon on March 11, 2007
I see you did a great job for an encore, Tycho.

Kasumi and Ayane did a great job soothing Hayabusa's wounds from Alpha's obtaining his seed, and the Beta that resulted from it gave Alpha needed "humanity" in the form of lust, intense orgasm and enough energy to blow Donovan's base sky-high.

The Instant Action segments were great too.

While Christie might not wanted to have bring life into the world due to the life she has, that doesn't mean she can't enjoy a man like Hayabusa. Although, she might think if things were different, she might have wanted more than just a roll in the hay.

Helena might've felt her "internal clock" go off when others tell her she's had too many attempts to take her out, and so she wants Hayabusa, the only man who ever sexually sated her, to make an heir with him and keep DOATEC in Douglas hands. And so the two make sure the next title Helena has is "Mommy."

Leifang brought Hayabusa to madness with every Ancient Chinese Sexual Secret she had, so even he couldn't tell what was her hand/foot techinique...and what was her actually mounting him. I don't know if I could tell either in his shoes. When she gets his seed, Leifang gets Hayabusa to go all out. Which he does.

Hitomi looked fondly at Hayabusa as "family" so she yearned for her "brother" to give little sister his seed. Which he also does.

Lisa? After her roll in the sand and surf with Hayabusa, gets him to another scene where sex and water also play a part. While he doesn't come in her, he makes her very happy indeed.

Tina's first scene with Hayabusa was more of a long race to keep from orgasm, this time her "Ironman Sexual Triathalon" has him having to go the distance, even to where they can only turn their world into themselves as they degenerate into "primal mode," thinking of the next fucking as each tries to outlast the other. It's only when in the Island's medical center do we find them becoming "human" again, even if Tina's dreaming of her matings with Hayabusa. Hayabusa finds that Kasumi conceived when they had their "ninja-three way" with Ayane.

With Ayane's second solo chapter, we see Hayabusa setting into the role of "expectant father" and Kasumi enjoying the fact she has the child of the man she loves within her. Seeing as Hayabusa has let himself go a little (which in DOA standards isn't a good thing), Gen Fu gets Ayane to help get Hayabusa retrained. No doubt when she talked with Kasumi, Ayane got the OK to get naughty with Hayabusa (which is where the sensual twists into their workout come in).

But then at the last, we find Gen Fu has enjoyed the show, while the newly arrived Elliot had found Zack's island, and "laid claim" to Hitomi. Which then sets up for the second book, where Elliot tells of how our favorite German-Japanese spitfire helps make a man out of him.

That does make a reader wonder, though...will there be a "next-generation/twenty years later" follow up?

How well will time have treated them all, to start with?

Will Ayane have conceived with Hayabusa as well by then, as she had wanted the same time her sister had? Would Helena's child with Hayabusa know "Father" and his love? With Leifang and Hitomi, did those two also conceive on the island, and what of the Elliot-Hitomi bonds?

Would Elliot be comfortable knowing Hitomi might have Hayabusa's child, or did Elliot instead make sure the child that might be within her was his?

Oy, this is sounding like a video-game soap opera now, but I loved the series ever since the first 8 chapters, and I'm a little sad to see this book end.

Keep on writing and keep it keepin' on, Tycho!

Scalon
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From ANON - Small Ninja on March 09, 2007
I think that the new adventures with Eliot and the DOA girls should get a separate story since its no longer Ninja Gaiden!!!

Might i add also a wish for a Tina and Lisa clash[and i know that i'm not the only one]?? If justice needs to be done to Lisa, only Tina can deliver it, they already have a relationship, are long time friends and both are equally confident in their sexuality!!!
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From ANON - Kiri117 on February 23, 2007
I have to say, you are an awesome writer. There's 20 chapters of sex, but none of it feels repetitive, yet it's the same characters. You just went further than most other authors on here, as you implied in the first chapter. I love it, you take it seriously and write an actual *story* into the sex while taking into account the personalities of each character. A lot of the fics I've seen are out of character, sometimes not completely, but still out of character even when the author doesn't warn you of such. The complete impossibility of the actual happenings are in line with the series itself, as you mention a few times, so that's perfectly permissible and would be the only thing I would otherwise spot as an annoyance.

So, through all that rambling, I mean to say that you're instantly my favorite author on here and that your story was simply sublime, magnificently told and with an infitesimal number of mistakes, which I find impressive in and of itself. All in all, it deserves 6/5.

Keep it up and know that your efforts aren't unappreciated!
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From ANON - Vix135a on February 13, 2007
Great job. I read the first chapter about Ryu and Ayane, how sweet and yet sexy. I love the way you make Ryu have such control. I've seen a pic of Mr. Hyabusa and from a women's point of view I can only image him in without clothes! ;)
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