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By : Tycho

From ANON - von mussel on November 04, 2011
ch. 61
"Will you two make love again?" Kasumi asked.

"No." They both said at once, with clear conviction in their voices.

"But why?" Kasumi frowned.

LOL and then cue ch. 62

Very well done. I'm surprised that you held off from including a sibling threesome in ch 61. Please tell me that there will be more than 2 pairs of sisters in that conference room with Ryu and Hayate in ch 62.
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From VFSNAKE on November 04, 2011
Gross but necessary.
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From ANON - scalon on November 04, 2011
The twists in Bayonetta's magic have indeed taken a troubling turn. There is love between brother and sister, and there is that which might be considered incest. Bayonetta's magic let Ryu transfer Dragon Essence to the women he loves, but afterward? It can be passed onto only those who pull the heartstrings of lust or secret longing.

Such as it was that Ayane needed Hayate. To give her love in a carnal way and closure in a much-needed one too.

Indeed it might give to semi-siblings love, but Ryu also knew that anything could go in regards to the scattershot spreading of Dragon Essence from woman-to-man. It's always the more "forbidden fruit" who end up getting called to the guys, since it's not usually their "prime girlfriend."

Of course, should Bayonetta find the disturbances of all this troubling as well, not expecting this? The twist with Ayane and Hayate might be what brings her and Jeanne to Hayabusa and the others, since Bayonetta knows she went from She Who Saves Ninja to She Who Has Much To Answer For.

Ryu would have to admit since she saw Tina get pulled to Zack, that was a tip-off it's not a usual thing. If Hayate was deep inside Ayane's heart, then her calling to him was from a yearning for love.

You handled it very tastefully and very tactfully, Tycho. Now all that's left is a certain Umbra Witch to bring some Karmic Crazy Glue--for she has to put all the pieces back together in this broken situation....
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From ANON - TVO on October 23, 2011
Fun little chapter. Not my favorite but it did advance the story and we didn't have to wait like a year for it.

Not sure Ayane would have a problem with it considering everything else that has taken place in the story. But what's going on with Ryu and Tina now? Didn't Bass just approve of her and Ryu being together and wanting some grandkids? I'm just not very fond of the Zack/Tina pairing. So I guess the Dragon Essence goes beyond just having a strong emotional connection or "being in love" with someone as it was originally implied. Or are we looking at it wrong?
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From ANON - mussel on October 18, 2011
So I just noticed something odd...

Tycho's original pairings (Ch. 20-33): HitomixEliot, LeifangxJannLee, KokoroxBrad, ChristiexBayman, LisaxHayate, and finally NikixZack

Transferring the Dragon Essence didn't work with HitomixEliot, LeifangxJannLee, KokoroxBrad,LisaxHayate and they had to switch partners (Ryu seems to be exempt from this since he's the source).

I can see why it worked with Leon but how did Christie transfer the dragon essence to Bayman given the prior example of original pairings failures? Shouldn't Bayman get it from another girl following the pattern?

Also, NikixZack... how are you going to tackle Niki getting the Dragon Essence? With Eliot?

You also made a reference to Zack liking Tina in the past... will you extend that to Hitomi liking Ein (Hayate). Throwing in Hitomi while Hayate is occupied with Ayane and Kasumi is kinda interesting.
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From ANON - scalon on October 17, 2011
Still, Mass, it was Ryu, not Zack, who Bass gave the blessing to join the family with. And who knows if in the future Tina might ask Ryu? She HAD spent 10 months of intense bonding with Ryu when she helped Lisa find out Ryu's limits. And at that point, she hadn't been serious about Zack then.
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From ANON - scalon on October 17, 2011
Tycho,

And now the quest is to get the one-time Ein to become infused with Dragon Essence--though it might not take HALF the Roses but more to:P

It was a gutsy move, but Zack would have been the only member of the DOA group to have enough liquidity to aid Helena in her gamble. Niki didn't like it, but Zack had cards to play:

1) He knew Ryu Hayabusa was involved.
2) It was sex based, and Ryu was the super-ninja superstud.
3) The value of the Roses was great once Ryu joined, so if Helena was going to take them over, now was the time before it got too high for anyone to get a part of.
4) He and Niki owed Ryu, and when it came to it, Zack knew smart money was on Ryu, not against Ryu.
5) It made for good Karma, and a gambler and his Lady Luck needed as much as could be gotten.

And that made for a grand slam that meant a big payout in many different ways:

Cash proceeds from the takeover and Rumble Royale PPV meant Zack's bet-the-works gamble paid off.

Getting some from Tina (and Aisha bringing Niki around) meant Zack and his Lady Luck could be two new talented faces in the next run of the Rumble Roses XXX.

And with Aisha smoothing things in, it seems like it's gonna be big goings on--but Zack needs to remember, with his stake in the business, he's on a performance-based review just about every time. As long as he can make the audience root for him and get them to loosen up, he'll do just fine. Ryu's not bad, but sometimes you have to be willing to lighten up and enjoy what you do. Zack's the goofy guy who loves what he does, and it works for him.

Which meant things were looking up big time--though the onus of Tina's Mom's passing was lifted when Dixie gave Bass his new lease on life.

Though the film of Christie's egg and Bayman's sperm playing "chicken" and Helena's confirmation of her own pregnancy (her second with Ryu) the main rule is: If two people with the Dragon Essence were to actively want to have a child, they will. This way they're not doing things by halves--and no unwanted pregnancies.

Though this DOES now beg a question...is AYANE the one to give her half-brother the Dragon Essence? A LOT Of speculation here:) If so, what would be the barriers for the coupling? Fujiko invoked a little guilt in Hayate (who had a bit of a twinge for his half-sis), so if it was just for a reminder of Ayane, what would happen for the real deal?

And would Ayane feel guilty about the semi-incest? (Bayonetta really must be a wicked Umbra Witch--and likes hentairules.net as well:P)

I hope I can keep helping you with more good stuff :)

Scalon

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From GuiltyDevilGearSolid on October 15, 2011
I honestly hope you are not planning on repeating the whole Ninja Roses XXX tournament again except with Zack. Still I must congratulate you on getting 200 reviews. So now thanks to Bayonetta, crack pairings are going to be showing up. I take it now Hayate will be sleeping with one or both of his sisters. It's not something I can approve of but there are worse hookups I can think up of that can occur.

Another baby on the way?! Is Ryu Hayabusa planning to having a baby in every continent?!

On a positive note,I must say that I can accept the foursome Zack had but wow he is a trooper because friends with benefits is not something I can do especially since I know who she is sleeping with and the guy is one I will be seeing him quite often.

Ryu doesn't need Tina anymore. He has five women to take care of and Zack obviously likes her way more than he does.

Props to Ryu for hooking up with Helena and Kokoro.

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From ANON - Small Ninja on October 14, 2011
Great chapter,(60) one of the best and not to sound cheesy with something like best sex scene ever but that Tina and Zack is definitely in my top 5. Great chemistry and use of dialog between the two, it was a nice throwback to the early Tina sex scenes, showing sexual athleticism and using provocative dirty talk.

And I�m all for Zack being the new male contender, he fits nicely in the situation and again as said he is a good match with Tina, not just like pairing or love interest but to add mix to the story progress and sex of course.

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From VFSNAKE on October 13, 2011
Awesome! Give ryu more kids!
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From ANON - von mussel on October 12, 2011
Ch.60

I know this is your story man and I'm actually for Zack becoming Ryu's replacement in the RRXXX contest but are really going to break up Ryu and Tina? Seems like a waste considering all the effort you put in past chapters insinuating that there's more to it than spectacular sex between Ryu and Tina. Come to think of you also had Christie say something along the lines of Ryu making her feel like settling down (Ch.14) but turned out to be a red herring...

So... sibling threesome next time? Kasumi walking in on Ayane already riding Hayate and joining in? Go for it.
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From ANON - TVO on September 11, 2011
Good little filler chapter. Now I'm curious if this Dragon Essence and it spreading around is really such a good idea. I mean I guess as long as they keep it with close friends, confidantes, and lovers it is OK. But Torchwood: Miracle Day sort of explored that things would get quite rough if everyone on earth suddenly became immortal. Well I guess not typically immortal since according to this story, people can still die or be killed in battle even with the Dragon Essence.

It looked like Tycho had read some feedback and took it into account with the most recent chapter. I guess that's alright. We hear from Tycho so little these days and he doesn't provide his end of chapter commentary anymore, it is hard to figure out what he thinks or where he was wanting to go with certain choices.

Tycho I do very much appreciate how quick the updates on these last two chapters have been. I love the story so its been great to see the quicker updates and things are definitely progressing and moving along. I'm looking forward to seeing how Reiko works out as Ryu's new addition to his harem. Reiko might be a wrestler, but I imagine experts like Kasumi and Ayane could teach her a few things about fighting and self-defense . . . and sensual techniques too :) .
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From GuiltyDevilGearSolid on September 07, 2011
Much better. Thank you for avoiding going into too much graphic details with the Christie,Bayman, and Leon threesome. Me and the other reviewers that weren't too fond of two guys drilling a woman are rather pleased for that decision.

Oh I see what you did there with Reiko stating what I said about my objection to her being a part of the harem and not being able to defend should the fiends and greater fiends start showing up.

Well Ryu Hayabusa you do have a fine point,but at least Rachel was able to pay back the favor by saving your behind from being consumed in lava. That's the best Reiko can do;being reduced to a babysitter. Good to know she knows her place.

Giving all of the males a power they can barely comphrend and understand its uses not to mention why is exactly Bayonetta allowing this to occur without incident. Nothing possibly can go wrong with that. /sarcasm

The two Texans hooked up I see Dixie Clements and Bass Armstrong. That makes sense taking into account all the factors of their bonding.

But that is going to make things very awkward for Tina and Dixie. I mean it's one thing to be best friends with someone who is screwing your old man,but when the woman in question looks a lot like yourself,your dad has a sick obsession with you that goes beyond normal father/daughter bonding, and his wife had died,that's a recipe for disaster.

I hope to God you don't ever plan on having father and daughter having sex with each other. I don't need that mental image in my mind. While I am not exactly one to shy away from incest as Ayane/Kasumi is one of my favorite Dead Or Alive pairings,that type of incest is just all sorts of wrong. I shouldn't have to tell you that in real life that type of shit is disturbing and usually leads to rape. Plus Tina does not like her father in that way.

Also please no pregnant fucking. Let this be one of the few lemons on this site without any of that gross fetish shit.

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From ANON - scalon on September 07, 2011
The age-old question: What happens when you catch your best friend humping your father, even if she gave him life-giving gifts that made him be reset to his prime and then some?

That's the big question Tina might need to deal with Dixie and Bass. Bass was a lonely man and a tough customer, and no doubt there was a "Texan Connection" there. And anyone who could refuse to notice Dixie is either taken, uninterested or dead:P

And the fact that your biggest fan gave you, the fading star, more fuel to keep burning bright, that helps make you realize she's one to keep hold of.

Of course, there IS the age-old concern: if Dixie's having sex with Bass, what might Tina's fear she's going to possibly call her best friend "Mom" come to pass? Though of course, with Sergeant Clemets having "got her man" then having gotten to enjoy him--that's going to be one case of original badass Bass riding busty blonde badass Dixie :P

Of course, with Reiko now "part of the family" she's willing to help with child care--showing sometimes when others step up to save your collective lives from evil, taking care of figurative nieces and nephews is a VERY small price to pay in comparison.

These two chapters were a 1-2 shot that really hit the spot. Really makes a story buzz with life and vitality, though the Tina-Bass-Dixie angle just got VERY more interesting. As I'd mentioned, Dad's been a lonely man and your best friend's his biggest fan...so when she gives your Dad her best, ticklish is a mild way of putting it.

And of course, one almost wonders if Christie had Bayman and Leon as part of a "sandwich" :P The Dragon Essence boosting Christie's libido to taking to men with "big guns" after a ninja with long sword--yes, she's being hungry indeed:P
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From ANON - Small Ninja on September 07, 2011
A clever way to add Bass to all the tension and drama. Dixie is a good choice since she's basically Rumble Roses Tina(you have even misspelled Tina for Dixie in couple of lines) ,and Bass being obsessed with Tina to the point of physical attraction makes sense since that's his doa storyline. Nothing wrong also if you make Bass x Tina sex scene, there's ton of doa ninja incest fiction.
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