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Reviews for Bloody Domination 2: Straitjacket

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From ANON - Sarai on October 15, 2011
Personally I've always found Deus ex Machina to be a cheap excuse for a writer wishing to end something. I don't fault them for it, because lord knows that I can understand wanting to finish/work on another project, but I just can't help thinking two things:

The first is that you did not use a Deus ex machina... because they are an improbable or artificial device inserted to summate or conclude plot issues that would otherwise be difficult to tie together.

The second being that I believe death to be all to easy of a conclusion. As a wise man once said, "t'is far easier to die than to live."

My personal opinion? You have already established in the cannon of your story that Shadow has regenerative powers... so a meager litter stab wound from metal Sonic would be nothing (hell, Rouge did more damage to him in the first part). You have also barely touched upon the road to redemption. So my thoughts are thus: give it a little bit of time, work on Prison Island Break, and when you want to sum this story up good and proper... I have the PERFECT idea. I'd be interested in doing a collab, if you are at all inclined to do so. My resume can be found on fanfiction, under the name MagicalMistressSarai (I don't have any Sonic works, but I have plenty of writing up there). As for my Sonic resume, I happen to have aquired in my life time several dozen issues of the arch comics, and I have beaten the important Sonic the Hedgehog games.

Feel free to message me on fanfiction or send me an email any time. As always, I'm a great fan of you work. ;)
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From ANON - Weasel (Unsigned) on May 10, 2007
I can't help but feel disappointed, really.
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From ANON - Maniacal Mercury on May 04, 2007
Great chapter. Bad ending. This chapter felt extremely pushed. Just so many ideas and events just seemed to get thrown together like shit hitting a fan which did turn out decent but many scenes just seem to end and change to something different when there should of been more. Many spots felt like they should of been drawn out longer and in the end felt like a bunch of crazy randomness. Which isn't bad but felt out of place in how the story has been written so far. I say it's a bad ending because it's so frank and just stops when it feels like it should continue at least for another chapter. Like perhaps Shadow's funeral and a mini adventure to recover the master emerald from Eggman? Shadow's death hit with such a small impact it's like it should not of mattered which didn't help that Sonic despite his brief moment of rage didn't seem to care anymore after he had destroyed the rest of Metal Sonic. And now on a completely unrelated note YAY TAILS CAME BACK I LOVE YOU!
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From ANON - Weasel (Unsigned) on April 26, 2007
Hurry up and updaaaaaate! =D
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From ANON - Silmarion on April 25, 2007
Where to begin... I have been reading you for quite some time, I stopped reviewing after a while, but I still read. I must say that you are quite possible two of the best authers I've ever had the pleasure to read. You have mastered Drama, Horror, Humor and Sci-Fi/Fantasy, some of the hardest genres to write in. You revieved the classic, Sympithetic Villian, whose background and fall from grace are as complex as the hero's background. They have emotions and reasons, not just evil for its own sake. And your heros are human, with strengths and flaws just like the rest of us. You take character and have them do things that they would never do in cannon, but you make it beleiveble, your fan characters don't gall or annoy, but fit in seemlessly. And you don't just write sex, you actually make a plot, a dark, complex and compelling story. I hope you keep writting BD, ARAAT, and perhaps go back to UB some time. Please, never let any negitive reviews get to you. Your style is perect just the way it is. Sorry for the length.
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From kittynakajima on April 19, 2007
And just when I thought you couldn't get any more twisted, you make this into a hardcore yaoi fic.
Just kidding, though I still kinda wonder where that naughty little voice inside Shadow's head disappeared to. I'm not entirely sure that I like that it's become more of a whisper in recent chapters, but at least Shadow's overriding the influence to the point where he's not doing something psychotic.
Oh well, the repentant, sexual pleasure giving Shadow is far better than the psychotic, whiny one that kept going on about how he was 'dropped' by Sonic like a broken record. While the latter was a bit much, I'd still like to see a mixture/balance between the two in future chapters, unless you already have something else planned.

Finally, I must say that the way you write your sex scenes for men is on a level that I'd actually read. Most yaoi fics (or rather, Sonic related yaoi fics) are typically written by batshit insane preteens/tweens who basically take some hetrosexual lemon and juxtapose it to fit with male characters instead. It's so irritating to read a fic in Knuckles or some other equally tough character turns into a whiny, screaming bitch that's getting pounded in the ass by a beefed up version of Sonic...or even Tails. Ack.

That's it really. I wanted to leave a review since I haven't in awhile (though I regularly check for your updates).

P.S.: Sonic's final line in this last chapter was hilarious. I could certainly see him saying something along those lines. XD

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From ANON - ManiacalMercury on April 12, 2007
Ahahaha! First reviewer for the new chapter. Not many more you say? I just don't know what to expect. From the look of things everything will be happy and fluffy and full of smutty goodness. I've never really been a big fan of Knuckles but I like the unique way he is written in your story and not going over the top with his personality like most writers tend to do. Yes he can be a bit of hot head but still has some damn rationality people! Since the story is already complete can you tell me Tails is EVER gonna return? Not even a sex scene but his lack of involvement sucks. I'm assuming there's at least some closure on his and Amy's feelings about all this or is there a trilogy planned? :D
In any case, the story kicks ass, looking forward to your next chapter. Ja ne~!
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From ANON - ManiacalMercury on April 05, 2007
Ah... both disappointed and happy with this new chapter. Disappointed since there were no new plot developments and happy cuz that was freakin hot. Shadow's insanity seems to have hit the curb but I guess what the voice said was no
empty threat... I'm beginning to wonder about the origins of the voice... It can't be produced by Shadow since instead of killing Sonic they are screwing each others brains out and he's been pretty much forgiven and found solace in his love with Sonic and yet this voice still attempts to interfere when it should be gone. It hurt little Tails so I hope it is exposed, judged, and destroyed. Looking forward to more guys, you are awesome writers!
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From ANON - Weasel (Unsigned) on April 04, 2007
I do enjoy my gay.
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From ANON - ManiacalMercury on March 28, 2007
Movie night with Tails! Sounds fun! ^.^ No funny business from Sonic right? Except for that one butt in from "The Voice" Shadow's insanity seems to be all but lifted and even with it's interuption Shadow seemed to dismiss pretty easily. Is Shadow becoming...normal!? z'Oh GAWD!
I like your ideas...and Tails lives another chapter! Things are looking up!

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From Weasel on March 28, 2007
Awww.
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From DisasterMaster on March 25, 2007
Eh, I gotta admit... I can't ignore this story, it's much too good. I'll continue to read it, but I'll just quickly skim through the homo sex. Have a nice day!
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From ANON - ManiacalMercury on March 23, 2007
::prays that a tombstone and coffin won't be needed::
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From ANON - ManiacalMercury on March 23, 2007
Oh my....
I definetly like this sequel so far~ ::hides Tails before the upcoming madness begins::
Sonic sure is trying hard at this even though Shadow's "Please let me die, please let me live" attitude is kinda annoying but I guess that is intentional after all! I look forward to how this plays out, either he reaches his salvation or gets put out of his misery both very fitting ends albeit one being sad and sucky for Sonic but I don't
care as long as Tails lives then its all gravy for me X3
Keep up the great story you two! Sorry I didn't review till so late but I'm still here! :D
::prepares anesthesia and pain relievers for Tails::
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From Draconis on March 22, 2007
Aw Knuckles. Now this makes me very curious as to what Eggman wants to do and use Shadow for. And the echinda's jump to conclusion at the end made me laugh: you do him too well. I enjoyed this chapter and watching the interactions between Sonic and Shadow is rather enjoyable.

This is quickly becoming my favorite story with this pairing. (Okay, it's tying right now.)

Keep up the great work!
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