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By : chibichibi01
  • From bloodravyn on February 22, 2011
    i never thought of such a pairing until reading this!
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  • From Lynna on October 05, 2010
    Sorry, I stopped already after several lines. Reading Zevron and Alistair at just every sentence beginning really put me off. Try to polish your work more, this is so clumsily written and amateurish. :S Why don't you use your imagination more? Instead of writing their names just every single time, use other words. Please! What about "the elf" or "the warden" or using other descriptions as well? They were/are fighting buddies, right? So why don't you make use of that knowledge too? Just as a couple of examples. *headdesks*
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  • From chibichibi01 on July 25, 2010
    Don't know if you'll ever look at this anon reviewer, but Could you elaborate? I'm 23, but I'm not exactly sure what you mean by "age up" my writing. If you mean stop using words like "rear" and "backside" then I'm not entirely sure I want to change that. It seems crass and rude to use other terms when those suffice just as well.

    I suppose I could start using scientific terms, or delve into the scary world of purple prose, but I'd rather not.

    Thank you for the input though. Examples would be nice next time.
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  • From ANON - LL on July 25, 2010
    I mean this in the least mean way possible, but your writing is very young. This "youngness" is present in every one of your stories, not just this one. You use immature phrases among mature content and it is very jarring. Judging by your author's comments, you seem to be quite young yourself, but I implore you to "age up" your writing regardless.
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