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June 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really good hey, (even smutless initially :P) Dialogue is definitely your strength, I got a real feel for what was going on just from that but you know, I kinda miss the action a bit...I like to be able to visual a story when I read it, like a movie in my head and I find I do that best when there are things like...mmm...they looked at the flashing boards, or spoke sharply, or took a few paces backward to show fear. That kinda thing, but that's just me. As always, I really enjoy reading your stuff :D