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Reviews for The Sentimental Feelings

By : Cicero

From ANON - one-eyed Jester on September 10, 2006
This chapter really struk me. I've been following your story for some time, and your analysis of the difference between the conceps of friendship and beloved really made me think. What you said is true of course, but the philosophical truth behind it all seems to be just beyond too many people's grasp. It's a pity really. I guess your chapter gave me a sort of bittersweet nostalgia, having dealt with close-minded individuals at thier worst while being able to see the sunrise over the horizon, just out of reach, if you know what i mean. I guess what i'm saying is that your concepts are wonderful and the story is beautiful. When i started reading your fic a year or so ago i thought it would be a comical fic, but it is truly a thing of beauty. Please continue. I look foreward to your next chapter.
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From ANON - Flash! Roses on September 08, 2006
This fic is really fantastic, but you haven't updated in so long! I wonder, have you abandonned it? I hope not. As for a good yaoi horror fic, one of the best I've ever read is 'Lose Yourself' on ff.net. It's SoRiku with some vague Sora/Kairi, and my God it is just about the BEST horror story I've ever read! Seriously, check it out.

I really liked evil!dream!Fayt in this chapter. Yes, I've noticed some grammar and spelling errors here and there. If you need a beta, perhaps I could help? The plot progression in this fic is very nice, even though I've been waiting for them to 'hook up', things are developing so smoothly that even in the slowest of chapters I'm kept on the edge of my seat. Sometimes Fayt seems...not out of character, but different from how I interpret him. But he can be interpreted in lots of different ways, and your way is certainly more close to mine than many other authors'.

Please continue this!

I'm a native English speaker, and I've found it hard to adjust to the looser grammar structure of Japanese. However, I've found the nearly nonexistant structure of Japanese to be much easier than the highly structured French. Even though I'm nearly fluent in French, I often know the words and how they should go together, but using the French grammar, I just can't put them into a sentence. I often have to break it down into several smaller sentences so that it remains understandable. In that sense I think English has a bit of an edvantage, because if you get your words out of order, it is still more understandable than it would be in French. And of course we don't have gender-specific nouns!

Japanese is of course the easiest once you learn the particles! You can move the words around all you want so long as the verb is at the end! I think the biggest challenge in any language is the grammar. Vocabulary is just a matter of memorizing and buying a good dictionary, but grammar is just hours and hours of reading and writing and listening until it all starts coming together in your head.

~Ja ne.
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From ANON - Stella! on September 02, 2006
i made this. its a gift for ya. its about the story

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/39148915/

i cant draw very well but. i hope you enjoy it. keep up the good work! whooooooot!
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From ANON - stella on July 29, 2006
aww this was the best chapter yet.i dont think i'ev ever read a fanficton where its gone so in depth into albel the wicked nox the way he thinks or his dreams. never so graphic and descripive at that. that was so awsome... I JUST LOVE THIS STORY! and what do you mean you mean not continue it its awsome. and no its not geting werid at all by any means! ^_^
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From ANON - Seraph on July 28, 2006
I love the part where Fayt just wants to touch and play with Abel's hair. I wonder how long Abel would let him? lol That was one weird dream... I actually lost myself in it and had to reread it several times. I adore your writing style!! It makes me want to read the whole thing again and again (which I already did XD).
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From ANON - scat on July 10, 2006
The awesomeness of this fic exceeded all and every expectation I had when I clicked the link. It is wonderfully in depth (a very good thing except when it comes to Sophia, bleh), a rich and descriptive blend that boggles the mind. Eagerly awaiting your next update.
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From ANON - tama on June 21, 2006
I love this fic. Despite many grammatical errors (which is understandable for a non English-first-language speaker), it's still got a mezmerizing style to it that does make it enjoyable to read. I really adore the plot, as farfetched as it may be... and most of the characters are still in-character (or as in-character as they would probably be, considering the circumstances and situations they're thrown into). Plus, it's interesting to consider the philosophical reasoning, and you do have a way of making the reader really think about the theories you propose. All I can say is that I eagerly await the next update.
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From ANON - Rho on June 04, 2006
OMG!? O_O I won somethin!? -dies from shock- Arigato, Ciissi-Sama! ^^ No need to rush on it or anything, just being able to read your story is all the reward I need. I feel that this chapter has added a great deal of depth to the other characters, ones that aren't really mentioned very much aside from the basics. Sophia's thoughts and the way she resolves her inner turmoil over Fayt and Albel has transformed her from the annoying fangirl that most stories portray her as(Mine included), into a stronger, more human character that I actually can feel myself relating to on some level. Her thoughts and emotions open her up for us to see beyond the naiveite that she is surrounded with and makes her a likeble character. For that feat I applaude you. Also, Roger is just downright adorable. I have never seen this particular angle taken with his character and it works quite nicely, especially playing off of his "Real Man" obsession. It makes me want to hug him. ^^ Adray creeped me out in the begining of the story, mainly because he sounded almost pehdifile-ish. But, now that I've seen more of his point of view, I find myself enjoying how you've portrayed him even more ( Even though pehdifile Adray cracks me up too...>>). The little scenes with Fayt and Albel are absolutely adorable, especially the one that Sophia witnessed. The funny thing is, the character I feel the worst for is Cliff. Why? WHo know, perhaps my own experiances in life play some role in my opinion. Overall, I think that this chapter was needed and has added so much to the interworkings of the plot. Also, you officially Kick Ass, mainly because you like Within Temptation. ^^ -cheers- Hurray! I look forward to your next update!!
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From ANON - Seraph on June 03, 2006
Sorry that i wasnt able to review the other 2 chapters. I couldnt get into the website anymore till now. Abel is becoming quite the little pervert isnt he? lol It's soo cute! I can't wait for the next one!
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From ANON - stella on June 03, 2006
whoope! i got my freind reading it. she loves it as much as i do. well, i can't wait for the updates. have fun this summer. i look forward to the next chapter. ^_^
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From ANON - Stella on May 09, 2006
i love this, its pure fluff every ones in charcter and your style of writing its clean,neet and descripive.yeahokay my reveiw sucks....please, giveith thee fan girls more fluff!!!!!!
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From ANON - Rho on May 02, 2006
Aww! This is such an adorable chapter! That it the only word I can come up with for it. Heh, situations like these kinda makes me want to smack those boys on the back of the head, mainly because it's so obvious that the care, maybe even love one another and yet they refuse to admit it. Ah, good old drama, got to love it. I await your next update eagerly Cissii-Sama!
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From ANON - Rho on April 23, 2006
Poor, poor, little Fayt. I agree with your other reviewer that for Albel to turn back into his true form would be quite wonderful, but chibi Albel is just so adorable! I understand how you feel about the whole disliking everything you write. I do the same thing. (In fact that is why Fayted hasn't been updated-cough-) I am sure that whatever you feel is wrong with the story will be resolved eventually, Ciissi-Sama. And as for the change in it, stories tend to morph as you write, mainly because ideas and opinions change, and also because it wasn't all written in the same instant. But, I still enjoy this story very much and await your next update! Oh! And I have a little present for you. ^^ I fell in love with the scene from chapter one when Albel yells Maggots from Fayt's shoulder and so I couldn't help myself.
http://ic1.deviantart.com/fs10/i/2006/111/3/5/Sentimental_Feelings_by_Kaarnishia.jpg
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From ANON - SuijiDL on April 10, 2006
That was, wonderful. I was wondering how the bath scene would work out with these two, that was by far teh best way to handle it. Poor Fayt, good thing Albel was looking the otehr way XP But on the other hand, poor Albel, he doesn't realize just how much he got accomplished today. In a away, I wish Albel would get his body back soon, but at the same time, their reactions to each otehr like this are too sweet for it to end.

And don't worry about the lazy part, when this place went down, I became very lazy with my own writing too...
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From ANON - Rho on April 05, 2006
This has to be your best chapter yet. I am absolutely in love with this paragraph:
"For a moment the amazed on-lookers saw a black image of tall, slender man carrying the evil-looking katana in the light that the celestial being was giving off. The black, long-haired man stepped closer to the celestial male and it seemed for a moment that he wound his arms around the holy person and kissed him deeply, like trying to savor the other one and drown the holy one into his darkness and evilness."

Actually, that whole section concerning Fayt's destroyer power is wonderful. I like how you have seperated the paragraphs and thoughts with Fayt's calling of Albel's name. The imagery and diction is well done and the style in which you have written it is perfect for the Angel/Demon theme. It's a wonderful theme and I agree with you, it suits them quite well. I'm impressed! ^^ I look forward to your next update!
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